I need your opinion

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by bestwriter, Apr 12, 2011.

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    bestwriter, Apr 12, 2011 IP
  2. Senobia

    Senobia Notable Member

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    #2
    Semi-informative, poorly written
     
    Senobia, Apr 12, 2011 IP
  3. tiddles

    tiddles Active Member

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    #3

    I assume that English is not your first language, which is fair enough, but trust me when I tell you this is not quality content for the Western world.

    I lost the will to live after reading a couple of sentences.

    Sorry dude, it is not good material.:(
     
    tiddles, Apr 12, 2011 IP
  4. east

    east Active Member

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    Well , for example here doesn't make sense: those who want success in minutes can never their target because article marketing is an internet magic but not any supernatural power that would throw you in the sea of success.

    But for sure you can improve your language ;) Just don't give up
     
    east, Apr 12, 2011 IP
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    Joelmonty Peon

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    The content is valuable. The presentation (writing) isn't very compelling. This may be an opportunity to promote having someone write the article for the person trying to market the product. We need to see that the article itself needs to be both compelling and interesting for someone to be interested in the project.
     
    Joelmonty, Apr 12, 2011 IP
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    #6
    sorry to say, but this is not really an article in the 'clearly written info zone' - and if you are really writer, use a better example of your work... good luck and keep polishing it!
     
    jameshobbs, Apr 12, 2011 IP
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    SeniorWarden6407 Peon

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    It's poorly written, the grammar is atrocious, too many repeated words in the same sentences. Punctuation not good - try using commas, semi-colons etc, to break up the sentence. If you are reading a sentence out loud, there should be a puntuation mark every time you take in a breath. Always proof read what you have written, or preferably get another person to, before you submit it. I would strongly recommend the following book - for anyone who intends to write articles in the English language - it's called "The Queen's English And How To Use It." (It's available on Amazon - that's where I bought my copy.) I have a good command of the English Language, but I still find it invaluable for things which, although I learned them at school forty nine years ago, I have tended to forget. It's next to me now, in my work as a copywriter/proof reader.
     
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    SeniorWarden6407, Apr 13, 2011 IP
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    SeniorWarden6407 Peon

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    LOL - I like that - it's something I use too, an awful lot, I'm sorry to say...
     
    SeniorWarden6407, Apr 13, 2011 IP
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    bianca0085 Greenhorn

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    You need to improve your grammar and your sentence structure. You also need to simplify your sentences and I would definitely recommend holding off on publishing any articles on the net before improving your skills. Don't give up though! Keep practicing and you'll get better over time.
     
    bianca0085, Jun 23, 2011 IP
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    Mouheb Peon

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    #10
    It seems that you're not a native english speaker
     
    Mouheb, Jun 23, 2011 IP
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    Your article would benefit from a revision that targets clarity, grammar, and punctuation. Don't give up. There are plenty of digital resources that can help you sharpen your command of the language. Reading articles written by authors you respect can also help you train your eye.
     
    Pulpseed, Jul 7, 2011 IP
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    Mithuasha Banned

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    #12
    Hmm, your article is quite informative! It has almost all the quality of standard article.
     
    Mithuasha, Jul 7, 2011 IP
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    #13
    Its informative but there are many errors.
     
    sakhi2916, Jul 21, 2011 IP
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    Try to limit your words into 200-250. Visitors might get bored and leave your site. Try using a bullet type article to emphasize important details.
     
    rickyfantana, Jul 22, 2011 IP
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    Keep improving the content, you surely can improve the content by working harder and practicing more.
     
    domainnamesalez, Jul 30, 2011 IP
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    #16
    Seriously now - why the hell are you replying to a thread that is 108 days old! Also you haven't said anything of any value - oh look if you work hard at something you'll get better at it. Wow what a life lesson - thanks for those pearls of wisdom
     
    MagicMonkey, Jul 30, 2011 IP