I need major help with my index page . . .

Discussion in 'Reviews' started by Submerged, Aug 10, 2009.

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    I just launched a new site, http://www.BillionDollarTraffic.com, and I have a feeling that the sales page isn't the best writing ever done. I intentionally made it much shorter than most (it's three paragraphs instead of 30 pages), which I hope will tell people that I respect them enough to just tell them the facts and let them decide if they wish to use the site. Anyways, the information I'm hoping to convey is this:

    It's set-up is initially like a basic MLM -- you refer people, they join your downline, and you get traffic based on you downline.

    Three differences:
    1. There's a sixteen level downline.
    2. You get a view from every member of your downline every week.
    3. To "pay" for it you just have to view five minutes of ads a week. Beyond that it's completely free to use.

    There's a forum as well that would be awesome to get a community going with as well.

    Any thoughts on how to phrase or style it better?

    Thanks for any help!
    -Alex
     
    Submerged, Aug 10, 2009 IP