Hi, Both of this landing page are derived from Kim Roach and Fabian Tan. I've just written an ebook which contains my experience as a trader in the currency market. And I need your advise and help to alter or nitpick anything that I should change to convert better. Also anyone uses google analytics's campaign as a free or cheap alternative to Visualwebsiteoptimizer? http://tradeforex4freedom.com/freegifts/ http://tradeforex4freedom.com/freegift/ Many many thanks. David
What has worked for me in the past is starting the page with a headline that identifies your marketplace. Therefore for your landing pages the first sentence could be... ARE YOU LOOKING TO MAKE MONEY FROM TRADING? If you are, discover here 101 things not to do and start earning today. It might sound rather obvious but by identyfying who your market is from the start will make your reader feel like you are talking to them. Thanks Kay - VetsBills
Review this: http://tradeforex4freedom.com/freegifts/ Nice, maybe add a product image (under bullets)? Or footer links such as terms of service, etc especially a contact us so visitors know there's someone behind the webpage. I would also widen (width) it up a bit, seems too narrow and add at least one sentence above bullets not just bullets something like: If you want to truly make money with forex, then you MUST avoid the deadly mistakes everyone else is making that causes them to fail... Some one line sentence... I would also move the headline all the way up i.e. remove the white space on top of headline. That's it, copy itself seems good. The other: http://tradeforex4freedom.com/freegift/ is absolutely better, the position of header, image and optin form are perfect I would still add some contact us links at bottom and probably for this one you don't need to do anything else not even a one line sentence above bullets (you do have one short one already).
Nice classic squeeze page, but the optin form I like to put in the upper, so no need to scroll down to see the optin form.
Hi. /freegifts From the top, the page just looks like BS, sorry, but there is just no nothing to it. Forex traders are professional people, the page doesn't look like that at all. Discover 101 Deadly Mistakes That You Can Avoid Losing Money Eh? Are you going for beginners? Then where are your credentials, you, and what is in it for me? And the following: "The #1 Trading Advise That You Probably Aren't Listening... My Secret Weapon for Being Alive Trading The Forex Market. Stop the Victim Mentality and Learn 7 Ways to Overcome it." Like WHAT? If you read that do you think that people will go "hmm, thats me, actually yes, that is exactly what is the problem with my Forex trading". /freegift Still looks like BS Still no you, still no proof, no testimonial to the guide "Killer tactics to get other traders to give you their money. (Loopholes found through emotions, deadly to use but it can hurt you too)" Some of these bullet points are still too vague and wooly (loopholes found through emotions) and have tints of odd legality even though they are probably legal. Oh, if you go into Google, type in the name of your book, you can bypass your signup and download for free from your download page All the best.
Nice overall However, I think people WANT stuff more than they want to AVOID stuff. In other words, they WANT RELIEF from pain more than they want to avoid pain. (Otherwise nobody would ever have a hangover or have to go on a diet or get credit repair) So I would ask, Are You Making These Deadly Forex Trading Mistakes? How To Get Out of Forex Hell and Finally Make the Money You Deserve and on the "freegift/" page, I'd lose the "In Less Than 30 Days!". Best of Success!