[help]please review my sales page ?? urgent !!!

Discussion in 'ClickBank' started by hilosale, Oct 11, 2009.

  1. #1
    i'm newbie at clickbank affiliate and now i'm trying to make sales page...

    i need your comment and suggestion to make my landing page better

    thx...

    regards,
    hilosale

    my landing page : www.eazycure.com
     
    hilosale, Oct 11, 2009 IP
  2. Ripped

    Ripped Well-Known Member

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    #2
    You definitely need some work on your spelling and grammar.

    "Abdominal Migraines Anyone who has ever had a migraine will say they do not just happen in the head." ???
     
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  3. dlm

    dlm Peon

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    LOL.

    That is probably the worst landing page I have ever seen.
     
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  4. mcapodici

    mcapodici Well-Known Member

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    #4
    Okay i'll give a constructive tip

    instead of

    "abou easy cure, cure with hypnosys and other"

    why not put

    "Eazycure - we review health, weight loss and hypnosis products"
     
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  5. tsmooth

    tsmooth Peon

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    You will be better off mastering the syntax of the English language and studying copywriting first, before attempting to make a sale. If you don't want to take the time to LEARN these valuable/crucial skills, then outsourced this. In other words (and I say this with respect to you) your landing page sucks!!!! And the reason why it sucks is because you don't have the basic skill sets. Also, you are all over the place, as far as the products you are promoting. Did you just randomly picked a product or was there any NICHE/KEYWORDS RESEARCH done??? Without the fundamental skill sets in place, you won't make it online!!!
     
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  6. 2-4-K

    2-4-K Peon

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    dude you will not make any sales with that site, its poorly designed and has not helpful info.

    nice URL though, but could be so much more
     
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  7. SiddFisher

    SiddFisher Active Member

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    I think you should approach someone to write you a sales copy. Have you written that yourself?
    You should first learn the basic structure and grammar before attempting such a thing. If you need a sales page fast, you should ask someone else to do it for you.........seriously!
     
    SiddFisher, Oct 12, 2009 IP
  8. hilosale

    hilosale Peon

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    thank you very much for all comment...i will do anything you say................:D

    can anyone give any good landing page...thx
     
    Last edited: Oct 12, 2009
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  9. hilosale

    hilosale Peon

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    i have fix my website, please anyone helped me what should i do to make my web can make more sales

    www.eazycure.com
     
    hilosale, Oct 19, 2009 IP
  10. Chri5123

    Chri5123 Active Member

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    Hi,

    Had a quick look through and my personal views are:

    * Just focus on 3 products - if you have a review site that has all the products on the market there is simply too much distraction.

    * Write a REAL review for each product! It is a review site after all, not just a bit of text explaining the product. Be honest about it's pros and cons and figure out what selling points it has that will make people want to use/buy it.

    * Make the font bigger so people can read it, jazz it up with a few pics, do a video review, post your results of using the product - BE CREATIVE!

    * So your English is not that hot? Use video and speak on the site or outsource it and have a video done for you.

    Good luck with it and let me know if you need any help?

    Chris
     
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  11. hilosale

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    how about my site now.....it's improved or no
     
    hilosale, Oct 29, 2009 IP
  12. dlm

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    #12
    still terrible, sorry.

    get someone who can write proper english to do the sales page.
     
    dlm, Oct 29, 2009 IP