Hello, Can you help me improve my video copywriting. I'm creating a video and I want to deliver the message in 6 lines. Here is what I've done so far. Every text has an average time of 5 seconds. Here are the lines: DO YOU NEED AN VIDEO AD FOR YOU BUSINESS? MORE THAN 70% OF THE WEB VISITORS WATCH ONLINE VIDEO THE AVERAGE YOUTUBE USERS SPENDS 27 MINUTES WATCHING VIDEO PER DAY IT IS NOW TIME YOU GRABBED YOUR SHARE GET THIS SERVICE TO GROW YOUR BUSINESS Because of the video setup I created I only need 6 lines of text. Any suggestions or feedback will be appreciated.
I would change just a few of the words around...hype it a bit more without changing the basic meaning. Do YOU need a video ad for YOUR business. More than 70% of web visitors watch online videos. The average youtube user spends over 27 minutes watching videos every single day. It is time you grabbed your share! Get this service to grow your business NOW. Josiah.
Please don't take offence, but you should begin by amending your grammar/spelling; e.g. "Do you need a video ad for your business? The average YouTube user spends 27 minutes watching video, per day. The chances are, given this is for a video, the person doing the speaking may have an accent which will possibly show that he/she does not have a good command of the English language. I hope that this helps - the best of luck.
Yeah my bad. I was just typing really fast. But I did notice later the wrong grammar before posting it in a video. So those things are already taken care of. Thanks for the input.
You are quite welcome - I would help anyone, as long as they were polite. Unlike some on DP - then they get the short end of my tongue! Incidentally, I always proof read my comments before posting them.