Have Mercy On Me

Discussion in 'ClickBank' started by KBunn, Oct 27, 2008.

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    Okay, I have finally managed to become somewhat satisfied with my landing page, and thought that I would ask all of you to critique it. Please keep in mind that I have never done anything more complicated than simple Wordpress before, and I had no idea how to make a banner.

    If you find something you think is awful on my page, I would appreciate any advice on how I can fix it, as I am still stumbling around the Joomla setup. I plan to add more content pages, but wanted to get something set up to catch my clicks from ezinearticles.

    Thanks in advance for any advice that you can give.

    http://treatayeastinfection.com/
     
    KBunn, Oct 27, 2008 IP
  2. kalel1980

    kalel1980 Member

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    Well, first thing I noticed right off the hop is the title, "Welcome To The Frontpage" -- probably not an eye catcher. heh.
    Otherwise, I'm no expert so I don't know much of anything else.
     
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  3. MedicAffiliate

    MedicAffiliate Peon

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    I'd say you need to be more confident and not plead for mercy before anything happens. People would much rather help someone confident and willing to learn than someone that whines in desperation, just a tip.
    You're a newbie and this forum is all about the pros helping out the newbies, no one is going to scream at you for wanting to learn, especially a fine mother of young children such as yourself ;) (or was that really true O_O)

    And your page looks good, you might want to change the "welcome to the frontpage" thing to "Welcome to my story" or something similar.
    You could also add a para or two suggesting that you recommended this treatment to other non-pregnant women or maybe even a man who found it incredibly useful.
     
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  4. mikey1090

    mikey1090 Moderator Staff

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    The copy writing itself seems good. The layout/fonts used isn't. One column pages with large call to action texts/buttons work best, even though they look ugly.
     
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  5. KBunn

    KBunn Peon

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    Thanks for the input everyone!

    Mikey1090- I tried a single column layout with large calls to action before this one, and it resulted in 0 hops. With this one, almost everyone who clicked through from EA also clicked to the product page. I know the fonts are small, and I didn't realize how small they would have to be when I chose the layout, so I am going to try to make it work until I have time to do another page. I do get what you are saying though.

    MedicAffiliate - I am a mother of four boys, that much is true, but that isn't really my life story on the site, nor my picture lol. It is my real story and picture on EA though. Also, I didn't mean to come across as whiny, I just was trying to think of a eye catching title, I guess I failed lol.

    I have been trying to remove that "welcome to the front page" title, but haven't been able to locate where it is to delete it yet. Thanks again everyone!
     
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    wowhaxor Banned

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    I have to say it looks good, I probably would not have noticed the header being a bit off if you hadnt wrote about it in your post. Many of my best review pages have little formatting at all and perform well. I think its more about content and targeted traffic as long it flows and doesn't hurt your eyes.
     
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    domainiac Active Member

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    I think it looks good. I look forward to seeing what kind of conversion rates you get.
     
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    mill123 Active Member

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    Joomla is a pretty full on CMS to use for a one page lp!

    looks good. you could think about tracking the links too. so change the TID from just WEB to leftban, rightban, footer or something. cloak them with php redirects.

    change Administrator to the pen name you are using. make it more personal.

    the Yeast Infection Cure link on the left is borked.
     
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    shand0 Well-Known Member

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    Banner is too large
     
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    zxlewi Banned

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    website layout is wrong.... it just doesnt look too good.... and all important information is below the page fold....

    however text write-up is good i think..

    your links on the left sidebar dont all work...
     
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  11. KBunn

    KBunn Peon

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    Thanks again to everyone for the input.

    Shand0 and zxlewi - I know the banner is pretty big, and cuts the text in half, but I am in hopes that visitors will at least scroll down one tiny bit to read some of what I have to say. I don't know how to change the main logo size, as it is built into an image in the template, but I am working on it. Thanks for your comments.

    mil123- Thanks for the comments as well. I am trying to figure out how to change all of that info to make it more personal, but it is slow going as I am totally unfamiliar with Joomla. I did fix the link on the left though. I also took your advice and changed the tracking ID of the different banners.

    domainiac and wowhaxor - Thanks for your comments.
     
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  12. jacky8

    jacky8 Active Member

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    The landing page seems very good.. the information seems true and is quite convincing. one thing i can suggest you is to cloak your links. just make a new file named "beastyeast.php" and in that file have the following < ?php
    header("location:http://affiliates.clickbank.hop.whatever");
    ?>

    instead of the link here, use your affiliate link. Now the url to go to the product will be yoursite.com/beastyeast.php
    or if you have the php file in a folder recommend, then the url wil be yoursite.com/recommend/beastyeast.php

    i hope that helps..
     
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    I found the color of the front page a bit dull..
     
    fisalnk, Oct 31, 2008 IP