I would have more space or add paragraphs. It looks ok. But honestly I didn't even read it because everything was so close together. Readers are lazy in general give them break between differnt thoughts. You may have some good content but if you don't space it up, your traffic is likely to hit the backspace button. At the end of the day ask your self if you would buy from site that looks like yours. Check out other sites simalar to yours. You want it to try and look as professional as possible. If you don't want to make the page longer then you may want to consider making it shorter and adding space. Now tell me does this paragraph look easier to read or does this one: I would have more space or add paragraphs. It looks ok. But honestly I didn't even read it because everything was so close together. Readers are lazy in general give them break between differnt thoughts. You may have some good content but if you don't space it up, your traffic is likely to hit the backspace button. At the end of the day ask your self if you would buy from site that looks like yours. Check out other sites simalar to yours. You want it to try and look as professional as possible. If you don't want to make the page longer then you may want to consider making it shorter and adding space. Now tell me does this paragraph look easier to read? It's less writting too. Hope this helps.
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You have a pretty nice page there. You can try some variations to see what converts best. But don't forget that you have to do SEO because it won't convert if there are no visitors to convert.
That reads really nicely, I am impressed, I just read it without thinking!! Nice job! good luck in your promotion!, I won't repeat what has been said, but its all good advice.
Great, im glad you like it First ezine article pointing to this website just got accepted and 2 more are already in the final review so will see how this works out. Will keep you updated.
First sale!!!!! OMG first sale!! I just got my first clickbank sale, wohoooo 14 hops from the ezine articles and a sale already!!! I am so happy i wont sleep. Thank you SOOO much guys for all your support. Withou DP i would never get a single sale. YES!!!
Yes it definitely came from my blogspot landing page because thats the only site where I promote the "get back your ex" guide. Unfortunatelly the articles did not rank well in google so now that they are not on ezine homepage i dont receive that much traffic anymore
Excellent job mate, one of the best I have seen on blogger for an affiliate product for some time. good pre sell and nice use of real life experience and graphics. good luck with many more sales.
Thank you very much I think I could get many sales from the page but my problem is traffic. This niche is so saturated that there is an article for any long tail or short tail keyword already
Man I must be ina good mood today here I found a few resonable traffic KW with little competition: 1. stop breaking up - 727 competing pages - 11300 search / mth on Google 2. get my ex girlfriend back - 811 competing pages - 12100 searches / mth on Google 3. get your girl back - 1940 competing pages - 11900 searche / mth on Google I used Senuke and did the research using the allintitle tag on Google, so it would be pretty simple to get on the first page of Google for all three of those terms above and you will be getting close to 40K searches / mnth just from Google.. add in MSN + Yahoo and it should be ok. Good luck
Great keywords mate, thank you for your willingness to help I will definitely give a try to these keywords, the first one "stop breaking up" has almost no article competition so there is a high chance of getting a top rank for that one. The other two will be a lot harder though. Google only gives 2 results for a search coming from ezinearticles and these 2 articles that get displayed are usually well established and have a number of backlinks too. I did a search for the other 2 keywords on google and they both already trigger 2 results from ezinearticles. That means I will have to compete against these articles to get their position which requires some SEO - at which I suck Anyways I will give them all a try and see what I can do. Thanks again
It looks better than before, however there are a few things which I would suggest you look at. 1. “Like before†The period should be inside the parenthesis 2nd paragraph “Like before.†2. The “i†in your 3rd paragraph needs to be capitalized I 3. 3rd paragraph you said "send her flowers†comma should be in parenthesis like this: "send her flowers,†same as with above 4. But then I found something I was exactly looking for a complete guide dedicated to "getting back ex girlfriend". <-- Period again, goes inside. Additionally it seems like a run on sentence. You should consider starting a new sentence after: But then I found something I was exactly looking for. 4th paragraph 5. You also said: a complete guide dedicated to "getting back ex girlfriend". You should consider adding the word “your†in the phrase. For example: “getting back your ex girlfriend.†Or “getting your ex back†or “getting your ex girlfriend back.†6. You said: I was desperately looking for a way to get her back. I asked on many internet forums for help but all I received was useless sweet talk and methods which I already tried like "send her flowers", "try to call her and say how sorry you are"... When you say “but all I received was useless sweet talk†it sounds like the people at the forum are trying to ask you out! Try something like: I asked on many internet forums for help but all I received was methods which I already tried like useless sweet talk, sending her flowers, or to try calling her and saying how sorry I was... Or I asked on many internet forums for help but all I received was and methods which I already tried. Some would say things that were useless like “sweet talk†or “send her flowers" or "try to call her and say how sorry you are." You also say 83,6%. Do you mean 83.6%? You should have a period there not a comma. You also said: If you are in the same situation as I once was I 101% recommend This Guide , without it I would never get my girlfriend back. Consider a new sentence: If you are in the same situation as I once was I 101% recommend This Guide . Without it, I would never would have got my girlfriend back. Also see how I added “got†in the sentence. It flows better now. Look, I had a LOT of errors when I first started out as well but you HAVE to PROOFREAD. It is ESSENTAIL. I know you want to make money fast but you have to slow down a little when you’re writing. Overall it is better with the spacing. And your copy is pretty good. Hope this helps. P.S. I’m just trying to help you out. Hope you can take some constructive criticism.
Great tips, thank you very much C.J. that you bothered to read through my page and write all of this. I already fixed all the errors you found but I dont think you dont understand what I want to say with "sweet talk". Most likely I used an icorrect phrase and it has a diffirent meaning than I intended. By useless sweet talk I want to say that the people on forums said stuff like "Dont worry everything will be ok", "Dont worry wou will find a better girl next time" "This happens to everyone, its ok"... etc. All these well known phrases used just to cheer someone up.
Ok, It looks better now did not get the chance to read through the whole thing, but I glanced at it and it does look better. The point is though you just have to pay attention to detail. That's all. Good luck.