Feedback Needed for Documentary

Discussion in 'Reviews' started by mikehallproper, Jul 2, 2018.

  1. #1
    Hey Guys,

    I'm producing a documentary about entrepreneurship and small business. We were lucky enough to interview Andrew Warner from Mixergy, John Lee Dumas from EO Fire, and Pat Flynn to name a few.

    We're currently editing and putting everything together. I'm tweaking the landing page and would love to get your thoughts:

    http://shohawk.com/generation-freedom

    Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

    Cheers,
     
    mikehallproper, Jul 2, 2018 IP
  2. directoryman

    directoryman Well-Known Member

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    Looks good. I like what you wrote. I would be open to being [slightly] more positive, from other critics, 'cause you talk about your luggage. Maybe you can sprinkle in some positive things about career life. E.g., I am driven to succeed, but I have blinders on in regards to the importance of a social life.

    I like the mobile responsive design!

    Your javascript writeup is aslo a plus.
     
    directoryman, Jul 2, 2018 IP
  3. Prompts pad

    Prompts pad Peon

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    It's amazing and thought provoking
     
    Prompts pad, Aug 21, 2024 IP