I'd appreciate a quick feedback on the following: http://www.CelluIce.com I wrote the sales letter, styled it, had a designer create the layout and such per my specs, created a script for the video model, and this is what we've got. I've received great feedback on it so far, but I'm looking for some "industry" feedback, from other copywriters. Your thoughts are appreciated! Adi Friedman Two Believers.
I think the copy is great. however, the audio that loaded automatically was extremely annoying and there was no way to shut it off. plus it almost crashed my browser. so I'd say get rid of the audio, or have a play button. good software for the audio would be 'web audio plus'
I liked the content, but not the style. Anytime I see odd fonts, colors, and highlights- I immediately close the browser. Why? Because those sites are 99% spam, or trying to sell me something I don't want.
Discover The Magic Skin Therapy That Melts Away Cellulite And Start Seeing Results... 100% Guaranteed! if you remove the word just from your headline scores much better. If it was my letter I would add a (real) testimonial and change the headline font color to dark blue/black and increase the font size of it a little.