does my content make sense?

Discussion in 'HTML & Website Design' started by Addar800, Aug 12, 2009.

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  1. #1
    hi everyone i recently built a site up called TheBigCut i embarrassingly want to ask if my content makes sense on the main site not the store, my grammar is not that good :/
     
    Addar800, Aug 12, 2009 IP
  2. wd_2k6

    wd_2k6 Peon

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    Hi,
    It's pretty good, you have a typo on the first line where thier should be their.
     
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  3. lufty

    lufty Active Member

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    Here is a slightly modified version of your text, and grammatically correct, I think :)

    "We can supply researchers and manufacturers chemical supplies in smaller quantities. In particular, some perfectly legally available chemicals, like Procaine (Novacaine), Lidocaine, Benzocaine, etc., that are subject to unreasonably rigorous and invasive enquiries. Only a very few major chemical suppliers will split or decant their bulk products into affordable and manageable, smaller quantities. We believe we can help fill that gap. We have an efficient, effective network of suppliers across the world, through which we can source bulk materials. If required, we can divide them into user-friendly, manageable quantities to meet your requirements.

    We have no minimum order quantities. (Within reason)
    We accept Paypal. WorldPay will be available soon.
    We hope you consider us your one stop chemical shop."
     
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  4. linkers

    linkers Peon

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    Good enough...why asking to us? you should be confident when you do something by yourself.
     
    linkers, Aug 12, 2009 IP
  5. hkhera

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    Your content is nice enough, nice font choosen but why did u put it in italic....
     
    hkhera, Aug 13, 2009 IP
  6. tkd_kid1

    tkd_kid1 Peon

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    #6
    check your links

    Cause on your how to make payment page your home link doesn't work

    But looks good
     
    tkd_kid1, Aug 13, 2009 IP
  7. ladylioness

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    Hello, site looks pretty good...

    We supply researchers & manufactures chemical

    In the above line--manufactures should be manufacturers

    invasive enquiries, Very few of the

    Above the Very would not have to have a capital "V" should be lowercase "v"

    and should have period after enquiries. not a comma,

    Other than that, pretty good--it's nothing major at all! You speak and write well.

    ladylioness
     
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  8. myst_dg

    myst_dg Active Member

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    Everything's ok but the italic font really hurts. :(
     
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  9. tifen

    tifen Peon

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    hey you , i think you did a great job , good design , and gammar is okay , in a word . nice . btw are you trying to start a business or sth ? im thinking about it too , i want to trade shoes , but dunno how to build my own site..:rolleyes:
     
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  10. lucysam123

    lucysam123 Guest

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    hey nice site :) the content make sense but i do agree with myst dg, remove the italic font, it will help improve the site more.
     
    lucysam123, Aug 14, 2009 IP