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Did My Copywriter Do a Good Job? I have mixed feelings.

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by DamonDallah, Mar 21, 2010.

  1. eddy234

    eddy234 Active Member

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    #21
    search for AWAI online you will find decent writers on there..

    Good Luck

    Edd
     
    eddy234, Apr 2, 2010 IP
  2. laurencewins

    laurencewins Peon

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    #22
    I only got this far before I had to stop.
    Regardless of How Fast You Were Caught Speeding!

    Any writer who claims that is good English deserves to be boiled in oil, drawn and quartered and then shot!
     
    laurencewins, Apr 3, 2010 IP
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    boydintlcorp Peon

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    #23
    The copy is a bit long and pehaps if you can have a traffic judge (active or retired) give a testominial and remove some of the customer testimonials that may help as well.
     
    boydintlcorp, Apr 4, 2010 IP
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    cernichcom Peon

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    #24
    DamonDallah, whenever I see such a sales letter, I immediately think of fake products, scam and something not worth buying. (Even though there might be tons of excellent products promoted this way).

    The site itself looks clean and nice. This is probably not the answer you were looking forward, however, I hope it can help you making headway: Why don't you cut down the sales letter to the very, very basics and insert a field to subscribe to a newsletter. Then you send out concise and valuable information about this product or issue every day for x days. (Maybe also make a video). This way you build a relationship, avoid the stereotype of such sites and don't overload anybody. At the end, you offer your product. Do you think people are more likely to buy it now? If they don't you at least provided interesting and quality information.

    You also have their email and can work with that later on...
     
    cernichcom, Apr 4, 2010 IP
  5. Caiden

    Caiden Peon

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    #25
    Seems to go on a little to long for the niche its written for (if you know what I mean). I prefer short copy. Tell them what u got, what it can do for them and what to do next I say!
     
    Caiden, Apr 4, 2010 IP
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    shydimp Greenhorn

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    #26
    it's kinda long.easy to lose the reader.
     
    shydimp, Apr 7, 2010 IP
  7. Mikesloug

    Mikesloug Guest

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    #27
    Copy writing is a little bit job and i think you are doing those job who your mind feel good and you are doing working with enjoyment.
     
    Mikesloug, Apr 7, 2010 IP
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    firest4rter Peon

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    #28
    I agree i got bored half way down the page, i think it needs tightening up a little.
     
    firest4rter, Apr 7, 2010 IP
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    Web Content Writer Peon

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    #29
    You've done a great job, but the text still needs editing. I would change these two sentences:
    That's how much that sheet of paper you hold in your hands could ultimately cost you! But there is good news.

    That is how much the sheet of paper you hold in your hands could ultimately cost you. However, there are good news!
    I haven't read the whole text, and I am agree with my colleagues, it is very long to read. But the truth is that "Quality matters". Seeing low quality content on your website, people will not trust you and will not buy form you.
    Good luck!
     
    Web Content Writer, Apr 18, 2010 IP
  10. dyadvisor

    dyadvisor Peon

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    #30
    I USUALLY DONATE TIME TO HELP OTHERS, THIS TIME, IT WOULD TAKE TOO LONG.


    There are for more problems, than others have pointed out. More that the number of fleas on a rotting dog carcass.
    You did not hire a copywriter, you hired someone that copies writing. It could be done better with a $7.00 product on the market. Plus that one includes an opt-in box.

    YOU MISSED THE KEY WORD COPS. People like police officers, quite the contrary with cops. HEADLINE: RUTHLESS COPS INTRUDE YOUR RIGHTS, FIGHT BACK PIG-HEADED BULLIES

    A few years back a cop entrapped me. and tried to murder me. 3 years to win a modest settlement. I am in the process of writing, "Cop Murder Conspiracy?" Tell it like it is. Forget the hype.

    Hope this helps, I am not being critical but practical
     
    dyadvisor, Apr 25, 2010 IP
  11. mjtaylor

    mjtaylor Member

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    #31
    Wow, what a difference between the last two posts ...
     
    mjtaylor, Apr 25, 2010 IP
  12. chant

    chant Well-Known Member

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    #32
    It's not just having the correct spelling and grammar that makes good copywriting work. It's also being able to get into the head of the reader. A good copywriter is worth what they charge because not only can they write the copy correctly, they can CONVERT your visitors into customers.

    That's what my clients pay me for, not because I can run content through a spellchecker.
     
    chant, Apr 25, 2010 IP