Critique of Sales Page

Discussion in 'Reviews' started by domainiac, Mar 14, 2008.

  1. #1
    Hi. This is a sales page that has been modified a few times. I am launching this product officially in a few weeks and am continuing to play with the copy while testing.

    I am uncertain about the headline. The intent is to spark enough curiosity in the reader so they will read deep into the copy.

    Whether this is the style of writing you like or not, would it entice you to read on if you were in the "how to make money online" crowd?

    I have thick skin and would love any observations, comments or ideas.

    Feel free to be specific.

    The book and header are being redesigned so no need for those comments.

    Thanks.
     
    domainiac, Mar 14, 2008 IP
  2. Perry Rose

    Perry Rose Peon

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    Are you talking about the site in your signature?
     
    Perry Rose, Mar 15, 2008 IP
  3. lightless

    lightless Notable Member

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    My suggestions

    1] removing the pop-up asking for email when you visit the page and putting it on the side somewhere [don't force it on them]
    2] Change the headline to something simple and realistic like "Your step by step guide to daily profits" or something.
     
    lightless, Mar 15, 2008 IP
  4. smileymarketing

    smileymarketing Peon

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    Hi,

    Nice copy. amoung all other things, I'd change the font to Arial.

    All the best,

    Lior Reuveni
    Smiley Marketing.
     
    smileymarketing, Mar 16, 2008 IP