Copywriting: AD Rewrite

Discussion in 'Services' started by brodaiga, Oct 20, 2007.

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    I have a poster running an ad on craigslist for an affiliate program I have for my company. I am not getting many responses. I am thinking that it could be written better. Pay is $20. I would like to see your experience in copy writing (itrader, links, etc.) and ideas for changes that will yeild more results.

    category is CL:

    http://philadelphia. craigslist. org/biz/

    title: Local Tutoring Company paying $200 per lead

    body:

    I am the owner of a successful in home tutoring company in the philadelphia/south jersey area (crowntutoring.net). I am paying $200 per lead for this tutoring season. I am looking for motivated self starters that under our guidance can help find us tutoring clients. This is part time oppurtunity.

    For every client you find that signs up for just 3 hours per week, you will be reimbursed $200. So if you should happen to sign 10 clients in October that would be $2000 on your part.

    This is a no BS oppurtunity, we are an established company looking to share revenue. See above for our site address. You are not going to make millions. But with our help if you can find 10-20 clients per month you will be $4000 richer that month.

    You will be traveling to schools, colleges, community centers and family friendly centers to make business contacts and generate leads. If you have a school consistently recommending our tutoring service sending you hundreds of leads we can only speculate on your profits.

    You must be a self starter who is motivated to shine under this business structure. If you would like to come join us, help kids, and make good money part time send me a resume at
     
    brodaiga, Oct 20, 2007 IP