Hi, I have started a thread just now describing my unique writing service. I would like know the comments from my fellow DPs copywriting Forum members. http://forums.digitalpoint.com/showthread.php?t=961718 Critique what ever you want. The comments will help me a lot.
I skimmed through it, good enough. But there doesn't seem to be a focus on explaining the benefits to the customers of your service, which is what is important. Also Samples/examples would help. Two little "mistakes" Hi, all dp'ers is the accepted usage
Hi article writer, Well done on at least trying 'cos if you don't make an attempt on anything...well...nothing will happen, so good on you for that. Ok, personally, I think the post is too long. There aren't any headings/sub-headings to break it up, either. I also picked up on quite a few grammatical/spelling errors. I do believe you have 8 hours to edit a DP post, so if you're still within that timeframe, you might want to go back and make changes. Good luck. .
Well, the writing needs a fair amount of work, but if you're targeting webmasters who need SEO-type articles, it will probably be fine (I've seen much,much worse here). BTW, what is unique about your service? I didn't see anything.
It wouldn't hurt to cut some of the length and proofread it again to catch any straggling spelling errors. Short and to the point seems to be the norm for advertising services in the Content Creation forum. hth
Obviously I can see there's a lot of spelling mistakes and grammatical error spread around. You might want to check thoroughly especially if this is your introduction thread promoting your service.
"And there are many more important things in middle of these two factors." --- something's missing here Best to proofread your text
I have stated the below statement at top of introduction, "This is a raw material straight from thought and not a well written piece." Well, i know the mistakes what you people identified. But the reason i requested for comments is, Generally in DP people go after on cheap, dirt cheap, quality, high quality articles. The reason they bother about these two things are, one is financially they have to benefited Second thing is, they know that only the quality articles have the potential to bring in traffic. Whatever might be the quality of the article, if the resource is boring and it doesnt contain what the targeted reader are interested in then can we expect clicks on the link. The uniqueness of my service is, 100% Traffic Generating Potential Article Guaranteed. All are rendering only the quality,fast turnaround, cheap prices. When the article is high quality and if the title is boring then who is going to open the article first. In my service i have explained how i can provide them an 100% Traffic Generating Potential Article Guaranteed. This is the uniqueness of my service. And I say thanks to all of your inputs. I am really benefited from your comments. I am about change the title of my service, first. "Finally A Real Traffic Generating Article Creation Service"
Hi article writer Perhaps you should have been more specific about the kind of input you wanted from us. The spelling/grammatical errors were so obvious, that it would have been wrong for it not to be mentioned. Even if you've stated that what you've written is 'a raw material' and 'not a well written piece', I don't think it'll hold you in good stead for (some) potential clients who come across that post. If you're saying that people normally go for 'cheap', 'dirt cheap', 'quality', high quality' content, then what 'high quality' do you think your post has created? I'm sorry, but I see no evidence of that in the posts you've written (the ones I've read, anyway). Sorry if I sound a bit blunt. take care... .
Hi isaa, Sorry for not being specific. But you are already right on your first post. I should have told thanks personally for that.Because you are only person completely, exactly commented what i expected. To reply for other people's post i replied like that. The post is for testing purpose. And the purpose of requesting to comment on my writing service is. Is exaclty to comment on the kind of service which is unique. Which is what you did on your first post. Besause everything i did in haste, including this post. I am really expected on the term of 100% Traffic Generating Potential Article. If any one argued with me, how can you do that, how it is possible for to create a 100% traffic generating article, and so on. I expected above kind of arguments,discussion. As this is copywriter forum, so requested here.And because someone may say like a person told, "Well, the writing needs a fair amount of work, but if you're targeting webmasters who need SEO-type articles, it will probably be fine (I've seen much,much worse here)." There are lot things to be done on the piece, to create a market for my unique serivce. The major mistake i done is pointed out by the first post of this thread, benefits. Now i am going change title of writing serivce, as A Real Traffic Generating Article Creation Service. See, now i have included benefits even in the title of my service, and now the whole piece is going to be explained in a benefited oriented way. Dont think i not benefited by the comments, all the post have sparked a idea to improve on that. But anyway thanks for spending time on posting this thread. Have a nice day.
You're welcome. Do bear the length of your post in mind when you re-work it. I do honestly think, though, that if your service is directed at English-speaking clients/readers, then you need to work on your grammar/spelling. I had to read your posts a few times before I got it (and I still don't understand certain bits, I'm afraid). Though you're aware the first post you pointed us to wasn't well-written, your subsequent posts are of the same quality, so I get the feeling your general spelling and grammar is like that too (unless you tend to up your game when you're writing for clients). If your articles can indeed draw 100% traffic, then that's great, but the more coherent your writing is, the more effective I feel your articles will be. Also, if I was a potential client, I'd wanna see evidence of what you claim to be able to do. Do you have a portfolio of work you can show? I feel that might help. take care and good luck...whatever you do. .
Try not to get discouraged by the comments. Obviously there are a lot of members here who are just trying to help by providing suggestions and thoughts. Only hard work can make the difference.