Probably nobody reviewed it as it wasn't finished, I will though as I have fleeced the bookies with all the free bets and providing you'll listen. Headline says "Learn How to Make Money From Matched Betting!" - Nobody likes to 'Learn' anything, cos learning sounds like hard work. 'How to Make Money' - could be that your selling an ebook so doesn't explain what your site is really about. 'Matched Betting' is jargon so if the reader knows about it they probably would've already done. You need to craete a headline that gets in to the head of the reader and have them wanting to know more. Your copy then goes on... "Our website was created to explain the best and most exciting way to make money from sports betting online." - Why say the website was created, of course it was they're reading it. This is fluff at a crucial point where you need to be guiding your audience to what you have to offer. "Matched betters always win – we explain how! – By using numerous promotional offers from bookmakers." - Your talking about these betters (bettors) in the third person, at this point you should have guided your reader in to the role of being one. "These free bets and bonuses upon signing up as a new customer are offered by bookies to encourage you to sign up." - You don't really need to explain why the bookies offer sign-up bonuses, you could just say that "you can take advantage of cash that bookmakers give away" or "cash is being given away - have your share, they want you to have it". The bullet points are quite bland, they should be written more powerfully to build desire. point 1 - a few hours a day for £500 per month, sounds like a lot of work - which of course it isn't point 2 - You make money whether you win or lose! - they can't lose so this make it sound negative point 3 - matched betting makes profits for the people that do it right. - another negative, sounds like they could get it wrong and lose (which they can, don't tell them) point 4 - Is ok, would have put it like this "You can start right away with just £50" point 5 - Why talk about gambling because this isn't gambling, so again makes it all sound negative. You then say "Matched betters do much better" - "Matched Bettors NEVER LOSE - GUARANTEED!" I won't review the rest except the next phrase "If you are interested" - By now you should have your audience clambering for the sign-up box, if you get the copy right. If you haven't hooked them by now they won;t be reading the last two paragraphs. Fantastic concept and if you have any questions you can pm if you want.
looks pretty good. I was a little confused when I got to the site. Might want to make visitors a little more aware of what they are seeing in the beginning.
@chasdad there are some good points there, im not going to "guarantee" anything because then im liable, and want to steer clear of this.
I wan't suggesting you offer a guarantee, but you are guaranteed to win with this risk free betting. Guaranteed meaning providing assurance (under certain conditions) which is applicable in this case. Alternatively they 'can't fail to lose' if they follow instructions, but then that's just the same thing without saying guaranteed.