Can you review my article?

Discussion in 'Reviews' started by jameswalker, May 11, 2009.

  1. #1
    Hey guys,

    I wrote and article to try and drive some traffic to my site, I have submitted it on GoArticles, but I want to have the article perfect before I submit it onto eZine articles.

    You can be brutally honest as long as you give good feedback.

    If you think the articles is good I also ask if you could vote for it on GoArticles.

    Here is the article:

    http://www.goarticles.com/cgi-bin/showa.cgi?C=1588357

    Thanks in advance.
     
    jameswalker, May 11, 2009 IP
  2. JamesColin

    JamesColin Prominent Member

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    #2
    It's ok, maybe you could add a paragraph with a title in strong/bold, like the others, but which says "delay foreclosure" when you talk about ways to delay it. This should be the last paragraph, so that when we get to your url delayforeclosure.org, it's seems more natural to go check it out.
     
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  3. kyrash

    kyrash Peon

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    #3
    Your article has good information but i think you should have started differently..."With the global economy situation it is currently in," Try changing that sentence to make better meaning if you wish.

    All in all nice.

    Cheers
     
    kyrash, May 11, 2009 IP
  4. coolamazer

    coolamazer Peon

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    Article is quiet ok. You could include some references too. People always look for case studies along with the articles. Avoid telling that you are a student. This hurts your article credibility most of the time
     
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  5. JamesColin

    JamesColin Prominent Member

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    #5
    Did that to me, when I saw it at the end, forgot to mention it.
     
    JamesColin, May 11, 2009 IP
  6. 2advance

    2advance Well-Known Member

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    Nice article, interesting to read it..
     
    2advance, May 13, 2009 IP
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    The article is interesting but I would suggest that you get straight to your point.
    Nice article..
     
    drdavisjr, May 14, 2009 IP