Can you please help critique my optin page?

Hi Guys,

I've just finished my opt-in page and
I'm after your opinion (warts-n-all)

Here is the link
http://www.instantemailsubjectlines.com/

Does it load fast enough?
Is the layout fine?
Would you actually want to opt-in?

Please tell me what you think?

Regards,

Michael Silvester

 

yeah it loads fast and it looks ok

 

The site is NOT working here

 

Hi Richie,

Works fine for me???

Regards,

Michael Silvester

 

Loads kinda slow here. The layout looks okay to me. I don't think I can give good advice on its selling power, though.

 

Come on guys...

You can do better than that!

Regards,

Michael Silvester

 

It loaded pretty fast for me.

 

doesn't work here you better find out what's the problem.

 

Hi All,

I've updated the new page with all the tips everyone
suggested. Please take a look and see if I've missed
out anything?

Before: http://instantemailsubjectlines.theemailforum.com/

After: http://instantemailsubjectlines.theemailforum.com/optin_page.html

Tell me what you think?

Regards,

Michael Silvester

 

Yes my opinion : it looks good and it loads fast from here ! (Romania)
Good luck with your bussines !
Best regards !

P.S. : Try to vaildate your code here : http://validator.w3.org/check?uri=http://www.instantemailsubjectlines.com/ !

 

I like it - but it has a bit of a "you're about to get scammed" feel.

 

I think it does a much better job of communicating to me what it is that you're offering, now.

Honestly, people in high places are saying that converts more.

 

Ok,

Just made some more changes
http://instantemailsubjectlines.theemailforum.com/optin_page.html

I still think that the headline needs something? Any comments?

Regards,

Michael Silvester