Can someone please take a look at my Blog?

Discussion in 'Reviews' started by jaredgravatt, Apr 13, 2008.

  1. #1
    Before I say anything I feel I must say this is not an attempt at advertising (I know people will say it is but I am new to blogging and simply want some good honest Feedback)

    The site is www.newbmarketing.com and what I really want analyzed is my style of writing.

    Is it good/bad/ugly and what can I do to improve it?

    Best Regards,

    Jared.
     
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  2. MoneyMoose

    MoneyMoose Peon

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    Hey,

    Check the bottom link in my sig and I'll give you a detailed analysis over an instant messenger.
     
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  3. woahdolla

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    just my honest opinion:

    what is your blog supposed to be about? i guess helping newbs market... so why would you bring it back apologizing? you are a business owner i dont really think you need to apologize, especially since it looks like you only had one entry before this one! not like yahoo was down for 4 months.. (no offense)

    2nd, i would change the blue background... just go with a more professional pure white look ala yahoo or myspace..

    3rd, you had a couple mispelled words in the first 3 sentences, so i would definitely spell check with microsoft word or something before posting...

    4th, i do like the domain name, but i wouldnt point them to another resource, especially not digital point ( i saw link in ur first post)... thats like espn having an article and pointing someone to sportsillustrated.com! if they come to digital point they might never go back to your site! (just my opinion)

    as far as the actuall content you have, i cant really judge because your whole post was about apologizing, which im sure is not what you will talk about in the future.. make a post regarding some stuff related to your audience and then we can judge your content.

    hope i helped!
     
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  4. jaredgravatt

    jaredgravatt Active Member

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    Woahdolla: Honest opinion is greatly appreciated, Will go over the suggestions you made and make some changes - You made some very valid points.
     
    jaredgravatt, Apr 13, 2008 IP
  5. rob33

    rob33 Well-Known Member

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    Do a spell check!
     
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  6. jaredgravatt

    jaredgravatt Active Member

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    Thanks Rob. Any other advice?
     
    jaredgravatt, Apr 13, 2008 IP
  7. vijayan

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    #7
    Post it in Website Reviews section so that you won't get infraction and get a lot of advice related to your website and writing...

    I am not good in writing myself so no commment.
     
    vijayan, Apr 14, 2008 IP
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    #8
    I am not sure about your writing but blue and white lines in background is hard for eyes. Change background, please!
     
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  9. jaredgravatt

    jaredgravatt Active Member

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    Thanks everyone. Feedback is greatly appreciated.
     
    jaredgravatt, Apr 14, 2008 IP
  10. Mills1

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    This is great post, it is give very important information. Really it will workout for me,thank you very much for sharing this info.

    ____________________
    homebasedbusinessdvd.com
     
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  11. magda

    magda Notable Member

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    Putting a huge glaring spelling mistake in the TITLE of your blog post makes a very very bad impression.
     
    magda, Apr 14, 2008 IP
  12. jamuna

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    try to use a better and unique wordpress theme
     
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    I like the design! ;) Good luck!
     
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    Nothing special, as usual.
     
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    Looks perfect to me.. good luck
     
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