Building my first landing Page

Hey folks,

I just need a good critique on my first landing page. Either I did ok, or I still have a learning curve, or just slight tweaks.

It is just a test lens that I made on squidoo for the hideously overmarketed rocket french. I cover a few sticking points and have a few paragraphs as well with supporting details of why you should buy the product.

Let me know what's up!

The page is at squidoo dot com / speakinfrench

 

I had a quick sneak peak..I think it looks great.

 

Hi, Icouldn't find it. is it squidoo.com? or what do you mean?
Dejra

 

It is very good. I signed your guest book. loved the security word.

 

Dejra, it is squidoo.com / speakinfrench I do not have enough posts to place a url up yet.

Update:

Thank you checking it out. I hope to write some more squidoo lenses in this format.