Some of you may remember me from the posts "copy from non copy writer" and the one that followed. Well I took all you told me and tried to mold it into one package and think I did better. Must say much thanks to Webgal, because I took a post from her's that was so good I HAD to use it ( hope you don't mind ). Without further ado here it is and yes I am looking for further critics good or bad as site is still in finishing mode. http://www.realtytocell.com/
It was really good to read and kept me engaged throughout Text was good but I guess you can still fine-edit the punchlines and headlines, IMO. Serve potential buyers the information they crave right away and reap the monetary rewards Capture real estate buyer leads using the one thing potential homebuyers already use the most - their mobile phones!
I just had a quick read through and thought it was pretty good, and I'm sure you would have captured the key audience pretty well. The articles were very easy to read and flowed nicely. Good job.
The most important thing about copywriting, which you seem to be grasping well, is the art of being concise. People have short attention spans, so don't give them an opportunity to look somewhere else before you give them a sales pitch.