Advice on Sales Letter

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by greenrob, Feb 13, 2008.

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    Hi guys,

    Just wanna seek some advice on the sales letter on my page.

    www.instantslideup.com

    Any comment would be much appreciated.

    Thanks !

    Rob
     
    greenrob, Feb 13, 2008 IP
  2. geegel

    geegel Well-Known Member

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    The copy had me going until you actually introduced the product. I tend to believe that words like revolutionary and crazy are mostly used by lazy copywriters and actually act as a turnoff. The element that bothered me most is the introduction of the price. You had managed to keep an engaging tone up until then.

    Otherwise I tip my hat towards the copywriter that wrote the sales letter. Great job!

    Hope this helps.

    Regards, George
     
    geegel, Feb 13, 2008 IP