$150 for the winner $50 second place for designing a bag label

thanks for the feedback. I will work on #14 again.

 

Thanks for the feedback PD. Here are some revisions I accomplished.
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i tried simplifying my design a bit

 

just came back from my vacation :d and I'll try to submit something tomorrow

 

Hi,
here is my new try... more simple than my last ones.
Regards

 

coolwanz, thanks for the new submissions. Please put up with me for this. I am wondering why I like Ari design so much. It's something simple yet I like it very much. I am not sure if I like it because he placed it on the bag or I just like it. What I wanted to ask you if it's not too much trouble, can you place this design (one of the ones you did) on the red bag? http://i244.photobucket.com/albums/gg5/juliansky7/coolwanz5.png I am just trying to determine if I can give a evaluation based on the image itself, or whether having the image/label applied onto the bag changes my whole perspective.

zenius: thanks for the new try. It looks better but it's still got too much white in it. I am just wondering if it looked better if it was inverted (less white, more red).

A-L E-X: thanks for considering this. I hope your holiday was enjoyable.

Mora: Thanks again for the new submission. Definitely a step in the right direction but not quite there. There seems to be too much text. What I mean by that is you tried to fill the whole space with letters and that makes it a little hard to read. If you read my post #39 you will notice the ones I like the best are the most simple and stylish ones where the text does not fill up the whole bag/label. I prefer the ones with more space and less text if this makes any sense.

 

Ok, thanks for detailed feedback.
Maybe this one would fit better..
Regards

 

mora, thanks but I don't think you understand what I mean. I am not talking here about your design capabilities, I am only talking about whether or not you understand what I mean. Yes this one is better because it's got less white but the text issue still remains. The text just seems to be too big and that is why it is a little too crowded. There has to be more space on the label and the only way you can achieve that is if you reduce the size of the text and space it out a little more. I am not sure if this makes sense but try giving the text more space to breathe. And again, I am only providing feedback, I am not requesting any changes even though I am appreciative of your entries and effort.

 

Here is my design.Feedback please

 

IM3D: thanks for entering this. It is a very simple entry and yet it's close to what I am after although not quite there. I feel it's a little unbalanced. Logo could be a little bigger but it's still not too bad. Using netto is wrong as some folks won't understand what that means. Whey Protein Concentrate should be right under WPC. Also All Natural - Whey Protein Concentrate would also look better on the same line. Fully Instantised should also be on a smaller white rectangle. Overall a very pleasant design which is easy to read.

 

#14 edited

 

Imba: Thanks for the revisions. Please do not feel obliged to do changes. However I am providing feedback because I appreciate your effort. Compared to the previous entry it's an improvement but only just. For example whey protein concentrate doesn't seem to be properly alligned. Also fully instantised appears too big. Everything else appears ok but you need to leave more space between the text lines. Somehow the text seems too cramped in. While it's still an entry I am considering I must also say the competition is heating up.

 

Thanks for the feedback and the kind words mate,but i'll let the guys here to do this job,lot's of talent here.

Ohad.

 

NightVision, those weren't kind words, they were facts. You are a very talented designer. Now, I am left with the tough choice of choosing a winner and I want to apologise to everyone else in advance if I seem picky but that is only because this design is VERY important to me.

Imba: much, much better and a lot closer to what I was after. I will only request some minor changes when I decide on the finalists which based on the talent shown so far will make this contest a very tough one.

 

Here is a revision based on the above comments :



Davey.

 

I replaced it to fit better to width/height relations of the bag. It's relly simple now, but good readable also. Yes, sometimes I understand something wrong, cause I'm not native english, but I'm still getting better

 

another entry

 

What about this one...

 

my entry .....