10 Top Fatal Mistakes Make Copy Fail to Convert Prospects

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by Michellylei, Jul 1, 2009.

  1. #1
    Lol, this is a test for "Profitable Headlines Every Web Professional Must Know"
    Headlines should contain 2 thing:
    what visitor care about?benefit - increase traffic ,40% off, free shipping, double sales, ruining your health, got top 10,

    strong words - top 10, fatal, warning, secret, number etc
     
    Michellylei, Jul 1, 2009 IP
  2. nitrogen77

    nitrogen77 Active Member

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    I just wasted 15 seconds of my life reading this.

    Any refund?
     
    nitrogen77, Jul 6, 2009 IP
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    jonathon Well-Known Member

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    Mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.
     
    jonathon, Jul 6, 2009 IP
  4. marketjunction

    marketjunction Well-Known Member

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    If you get one, let me know. I've got years of wasted time to recoup.
     
    marketjunction, Jul 7, 2009 IP
  5. Blinker

    Blinker Peon

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    I'd prefer the time back!
     
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    webgal Peon

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    I'm going to start advertising my services with free shipping. When I make a killing, I'll be sure to share. Copywriting with FREE SHIPPING!
     
    webgal, Jul 7, 2009 IP
  7. marketjunction

    marketjunction Well-Known Member

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    I think I'll start telling my clients that I know the difference between a benefit and a feature. :D

    Think you're onto something webgal.

    I've got it. Act now and you'll get a sales letter with a rock-solid, ironclad, no-questions-asked, for-any-reason-under-the-sun, money-back guarantee—less shipping & handling.

    For a few select companies, this service is just 1 penny (plus $5,000 shipping & handling).

    Call now, because I can't give this offer away all day.
     
    marketjunction, Jul 7, 2009 IP
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    Black_3v1L Peon

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    #8
    hmmm...
    top 10 fatal mistakes
     
    Black_3v1L, Jul 7, 2009 IP
  9. AC-Coach

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    Interesting case study in drawing people into nothing
     
    AC-Coach, Jul 8, 2009 IP
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    Clever... but misleading and so your bounce rate is probably off the charts....
     
    kylebolt, Jul 13, 2009 IP
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    AceWriter09 Well-Known Member

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    Hi Michell

    Here's an opener that includes all the essential words you mentioned for guaranteeing results.

    Have you ever stopped to think about what you really care about in this world; have you ever dreamed of increasing your traffic and doubling your sales without ruining your health by having to give your customers 40% off and free shipping – while STILL maintaining your top 10 spot as sales guru of the year? If so, read on.

    :) I was bored so I thought I'd just give it a go. Can anyone improve on that?
     
    AceWriter09, Jul 21, 2009 IP
  12. Michellylei

    Michellylei Active Member

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    why this guy banned? lol
     
    Michellylei, Jul 28, 2009 IP
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    webgal Peon

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    We're onto something. Let's team up and make next to nothing together!
     
    webgal, Jul 29, 2009 IP
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    #14
    If there's an opportunity to make next to nothing, count me in!

    Seriously though, did I actually miss out on the content of this thread, or was there none to begin with?
     
    ADNattan, Jul 30, 2009 IP