This or That? Pick the better headline!

I aggree with CD.. the first is better, but dropout would be a better word in place of punk...

 

The first one is catchy but also really targets the market to a younger group. Is that your intention?

 

I think you could make it easier, shorter, and more original. I hate the push button, automated, and such talk as well. Its so overused, and most people dont understand it anyway. Honestly I wouldnt click on either, not trying to be mean, just truthful. I also cant stand when headlines claim a ridiculous amount of money either though, first thing that pops into my mind is scam. I am hard wired to not accept anything that sounds good to be true. After seeing all the scams on the internet, I steer clear of these kinds of things as you always waste your time. My first thought is, if you are making 15000 in under a week, why are you bothering trying to market and sell this product instead of continuing to do what your doing to make that much money?

 

Both are way too long in my opinion. Of course I'm not a copy writer but I seem to remember being taught somewhere along the way to keep titles short and concise? Or has that become an antiquated "rule"?

 

The first one is definitely better but it is a little long and yes, it is A not AN. You can also use both but I am almost sure that the first one would work a lot better

 

I would create a shorter, sexier title and save the H.S. drop out 20-year old bit for the sales letter.

 

Hidden technique sounds cooler. Has a catch