Please review my landing page, thanks!

Discussion in 'General Marketing' started by yangyang, Mar 8, 2008.

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    Will very soon be in a paid ad campaign, and I'm rather new in this area, please if there's any viable suggestions, fire at will!


    Thanks a lot!


    http://w3ec.com/script.php

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    yangyang, Mar 8, 2008 IP
  2. Perry Rose

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    $15,000 a week? :rolleyes:

    Although there are a lot of morons out there, like the ones on this board, you will still lose a lot of your visitors from that alone.

    You didn't tell enough to warrant visitors to shell out $18.95.

    Those are the two things that I immediately saw that will hurt your sales.
     
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  3. yangyang

    yangyang Banned

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    Thanks a lot for the head up, sir. I appreciate it. =)

    Yes, I don't know if you have seen their site or not, the $15,000 a week is roughly what they have earned so far. It's true but as you said, the vast majority of us can't dream that much with this script because the next day they launched the site, it's featured on daringfireball.net.

    And my homepage is another proof, in less than a week, we have sold out more than 30 words, that roughly equals to $200 which is well over the cost of $18.95 and that of the domain as well as your time.



    So, what am I supposed to do with the landing page, I'm really new in this area,

    How can I persuade the visitors into buyers?
     
    yangyang, Mar 8, 2008 IP
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    Take out that $15,000, and tell more on why they should give you $18.95.

    As a visitor myself, why should I give you $18.95? Specifically, what can this do for me?

    As for the visitors who don't have much money, period, why should they pay?

    Take out pen and pad and write out all the reasons, and then put it in your site.
     
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    yangyang Banned

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    Thanks, doing it now.

    Rep added.

    Think, think, think...it's a tough job for me. lol.
     
    yangyang, Mar 8, 2008 IP
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    i dont like it
     
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  7. yangyang

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    Maybe using the homepage as landing page and changing the strategy from selling script to selling words?

    Just made some modifications, how about this now? Does it appeal to you guys?

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    Ok, I looked at it again.

    Maybe I am missing something here, but I just don't get your site. ... Selling English words???

    If I clicked on one of your ads out of curiosity, or read something about you somewhere on the Internet, I would back out again. Sorry, but I don't get it.

    And since there are a lot of impatient users out there, and it is also hard to get their attention, I'm afraid you are going to have to do better.

    If you have stumblers and curiosity visitors, most, if not practically all of them will probably have an immediate thought of: Now why would I buy words???

    Many will not scroll down. They will back out of the site.


    Sorry, but you and I know you are full of shit. :) No offense, but come on, brother.

    Test it, and see how it works for you. If you are not getting the kind of sales you should be getting, you may want to consider taking that out, and then trying it again.
     
    Perry Rose, Mar 9, 2008 IP
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    I like that it looks nice and crisp and clean.
     
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    are you talking about PPC ads campaign? i've had bad experience with adwords... REALLY bad! I made 60 bucks and lose like 356 dollar! I would never ever try it again
     
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