"my business never feel so good" is this right?

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by Rage, Nov 26, 2007.

  1. #1
    my business never feel so good

    its this line correct grammically ?

    Plz help...

    i will Rep in return.

    Thanks,
    Rage
     
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  2. jhmattern

    jhmattern Illustrious Member

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    No, it's not grammatically correct. We can't really give you a correction though without understanding what you're trying to say.

    "My business never felt so good" would be better, but businesses really don't "feel" anything. Can you clarify what you're trying to say?

    Jenn
     
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  3. Rage

    Rage Well-Known Member

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    Thanks..

    well... i was trying to put this as a Catch Line for my banners... (my business is for creating websites for start=up business's)

    and my english really sucks :D
     
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    jhmattern Illustrious Member

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    Maybe "looked" would be better than "felt" then. Thanks for providing some context. :)
     
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    Rage Well-Known Member

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    yes... "looked" sounds great... as my business is more towards Looks (like website represents the business and if it looks great then it worked)

    Great!

    I might want to use you for future content writing (as i keep in need of content writing)

    can you PM me about about your service charges.

    Thanks for the help.
     
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    jhmattern Illustrious Member

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    I rarely do Web content work anymore, but there are a few excellent content writers here that you can check with. :) The ones I usually recommend are DeniseJ, InternetAuthor, and Latoya. :)
     
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    Rage Well-Known Member

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    oh... thanks anyway :) so nice of you
     
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    My business never felt so good...would definately be the correct grammer
     
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    jhmattern Illustrious Member

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    Grammatically without any context, yes. With the context of what the business is and what he's trying to convey though, that line wouldn't make much sense as a slogan.
     
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    chant Well-Known Member

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    #10
    Go urban:

    "Dizz bidnezz ain't felt so dayum good in ever, dawg!"

    Technically it isn't grammatically correct at all but I'm sure 50 Cent could use it in a rap song.
     
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    anarmyofme Well-Known Member

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    That was ballsy
     
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    No, this is a gramatical error.
     
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    Rage

    Jenn already pointed out an excellent suggestion on your original question. I just have a quick question on your signature:

    "Adsense is Dead! Get $0.50 CPC $25 FREE to Join"

    What does the "$25 Free to Join" mean?

    Do you mean $25 FEE to join? or is $25 part of the $0.50 CPC somehow? Do you get $25 free? I'm not trying to be obnoxious, I just got fixated on that line and couldn't figure it out...

    EDIT: WAIT! I think you probably mean $25 free WHEN someone joins! Ah, I feel so much better now - that was driving me nuts! Sorry I'm so random...

    Thanks!
    Rebecca
     
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    Rage Well-Known Member

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    Ya... its mean you'll get $25 free when you'll join... :D

    sorry... as i already said " my engilsh sucks "
     
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    It would read better as "25 FREE when you join." :)
     
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    Hire someone that knows English well. No point in losing business when you don't have to.

    Both the "felt" and "looked" ideas are problematic from a marketing point of view.

    Good luck!
     
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