Spell check :-)

Hey folks,

I hope you`re doing awesome!

I`m about launching my WSO (warrior special offer) in few days and I want you guys check my sales letter. I`m hungarian so there is probably some grammar and spelling errors... would you check it out and let me know if you see any problems please. All I want to know is: is it fits to the english grammar and spelling requirements or not...

Thanks very much!

 

I'll let somebody else check the grammar, but if I were you I'd remove that ugly face with the middle finger. Here, in the US, for instance, hardly anyone uses that gesture anymore (unless it's a case of road rage or maybe among some teens / young adults who want to look bad).

I lived in Europe and Eastern Europe before, I know how common it is over there to give the middle finger for no apparent reason. I don't know how common it is in the UK.

So, if I were you, I'd probably get rid of it, since it's a sign of bad taste and replace it with something more appropriate for a wider audience.

 

I agree In Canada the middle finger is Unacceptable
It is a form of swearing and disrespect.

I personsall feel any one useing this jesture is immature and I avoid them like the plague .

If I receive any thing like that on my email I will block it and report it as phishing spam

 

As a native English speaker, the following makes more sense:

Fixed the grammar errors and spelling mistake in the following:

I would also definitely remove the face with the erect finger, it's pretty offensive, the rest looks ok though.

 

Thanks for your opinion! Well... ist not a harsh thing at all. Don`t get me wrong I know where you comming from!
But the thing is I don`t want to follow the good old was for advertising. I want to come up with something new if its a middle finger... lets see how it works. I just try to think outside of the box. All my friends thinks its looks funny, and they think people will like it. I don`t know I give it a go!

Thanks malky66!!! Really appreciate it.

Well all of you just said the pic is offensive... Its interesting... I personaly think its funny... So you recon people will take offense?

 

This "become a billionaire in 5 minutes" jargon is really cheesy.

 

The entire piece looks like it was written by a teenager. I would not take it seriously and move on if I read it. The money people (target/market) are not in that age group(teenagers). It simply doesn't work from an advertising perspective.