Fat Loss Guide: Fast and Easy diet

As the title says "Fast n Easy Diet" is another guide written to train the reader to be knowledgeable and become a fat loss expert himself. Purposefully written in simple to read, easy to follow format like video and speech. At the end of the day, you will become physically and mentally tough to become a fat loss expert and understand the work condition of your body to live life full of richness and happiness.

As or society becomes more affluent and the trend to eat out at fast food outlets and buy processed food to eat, our population has become overweight and deteriorated in health due to eating food with hidden fats, saturated fat, sugar, presevatives, artificial coloring and the lack of exercize as we glue to our computers all day. This guide teaches us how to lose weight and maintain healthy body. Afiliates are welcome to signup and promote it.

site is http://FastNEasyDiet.com

 

Do you thing this stuff will be useful to newbies like me? In that case, where can I promote this stuff?

Do you thing this will work with my Self Help blog?

 

man its looks awful, sorry to be harsh but its just not very professional looking at all.

needs lots of work , I'm afraid, good luck though

 

It certainly does seem to need some really basic corrections.

Leaving the whole structure and format aside for a moment (which is probably more than any potential affiliates will be willing to do in this ultra-competitive niche!) it needs someone to read over it and insert the missing words to make grammatical sense.

In the second paragraph, I don't even know what the word is that's been missed out of the sentence where it says "Do you that this"?! And just little things like "Become fat loss expert" (should say "Become a fat loss expert"). Just basic proofreading.

The headline is weak, the copy doesn't "lead with benefits", and some sentences (like "you don't lose but stand to gain") are very poor English.

Sorry - not trying to be rude here, but I agree with 2-4-K: it needs lots of work!

 

Totally agree, the header, background, copy, really do need some work. The video pitch is a nice idea though. Look at some sucessful health products on CB and see what they ahve done.

 

I wish somebody would come up with an honest pitch page. Like no pictures of obese women crying or random statistics that don't make sense (80% of us don't know what to eat - what?). Seriously - is it too much to say: are you having this problem? If so, "insert product here" can help you because it contains "this and that information". I don't know, maybe people only buy from these overly dramatic sales pages, but I bet you could be more successful going for a more honest, straightforward approach.

 

We can't keep on agreeing like this: people will talk.

 

this link is spam

I hope linking to it with keywords like weightloss scam will ruin the pagerank

 

Did you just agree with me?

(looks out window to see if pigs are flying)