Please fix this statement

Hey,

I would like to know if there is a problem with the below mentioned statement. I was hit by a surprise this morning, when a client claimed that my sample wasn't good. I asked him to spot one error, and he replied stating that the below statement had errors. Personally, I don't see any error. Can you guys correct me, if I am wrong. Thanks!

A good investor knows the essence of buying stocks at the right price, and most importantly selling them at the right time.

 

Would sound better as:

Great investors know the critical importance of buying stocks at the right price and selling them at the right time.

Your message lacks a certain sense of urgency, and it's kind of a run-on when you get towards the end. Also you're missing a period.

 

Thanks for replying. Appreciate that! I am aware that the sentence can be paraphrased better. I can produce better one's as well, but what I would really want to know is that if there is any error with the statement. Also the period exists in the original article.

 

It's just...boring. *shrug* also, you need a comma after "and" and "importantly"

 

I'm not a stockbroker, but the sentence sounds like a correct statement to me. Did you ask the client what he feels is wrong about the statement?

 

Even if I don't include, the statment can't be termed wrong grammatically. In my opinion, it can go without a comma.

 

there's nothing wrong i suppose....

 

I think it should be like this: Good investors know the essence of buying stocks at the right price, and more importantly, selling them at the right time.

I think that's the error that your buyer was referring to.

 

Perhaps, you could replace 'essence' with 'significance'.

Hope it helps

 

Yes. Punctuation does matter in article writing, so be cautious while doing writing next time.

 

I think, we can phrase the sentence in the manner you did, but I don't think my statement had any errors. I will leave this thread over here with the belief that the client was a "RACIST".

 

Where did the racist statement even come from?

Dude, it's a comma. You legitimately missed a comma, and there's no real reason to get upset over one sentence. You asked your client to point out a problem, and he did. So, you got what you asked for.

Grammar isn't really a matter of opinion when it comes down to things like punctuation. Either you need a period or you don't.

To be honest, I wouldn't want to work with a writer who gets so upset over a single sentence. Was the client disrespectful to you? And even if he was there's no reason to show disrespect back...act like a professional.

 

A good investor knows the trick and time of buying stocks at the right price, and most importantly selling them at the right time.

 

Yes, lavina dias does not believe in making payments to her writers. She contacted me herself and then vanished after taking work. She has given me two phone numbers, both of which dont work. She is offline on gtalk all the time.

 

It sounds poor.. Like you are just making filler and have no knowledge or feeling about the subject. Sounds generic and lame.

" knows the essence of buying stocks at the right price"

has a good knowledge and feel of the market, which enables him to buy high and sell low. / Might be better.

That Basterd..

 

Whenever a client asks for me to correct a minor grammar mistake then I make it and resubmit. Even though this does not happen often, it happens to even the best writers out there.

Here is a good practice that I have. I usually write one article then write another on a different topic. Then go back and proofread your own work after you change your mindset. If you still cant catch your grammar mistakes, then maybe up your rate and hire a proofreader on your end.

 

Oh, lookie, another dumbass playing the race card. What an idiot.

You don't deserve a decent reply back in your thread.