Rate this CB LP Page

Discussion in 'ClickBank' started by staffsergeantpeterson, Oct 29, 2008.

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    If there are any secret ingredients or spices that need to be added to this landing page please let me know...

    How to build your own solar panel
     
    staffsergeantpeterson, Oct 29, 2008 IP
  2. Sem-Advance

    Sem-Advance Notable Member

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    I think the green font text has to go.....

    Stick with the professional black & white.

    The Order Now button text should be Add To Cart button with Blueish background - Dan Thies did an experiment on it....

    :)
     
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    UltimateFreebies Peon

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    #3
    I think you should really shorten this lander, and direct them to the actual sales page, rather than the checkout. You'll probably see more conversions that way.

    And I agree - the green font has got to go. Seems a bit cluttered too. Just stick with a simple description and review the product. Help answer the visitors problem, then direct them to the sales letter. If you can hype them enough in your LP, trust me - They will shoot directly for the order button on the sales page anyway.
     
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    staffsergeantpeterson Member

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    #4
    You guys are awesome thanks for the nitty gritty.

    Change the font color good tip.

    Okay but what do you mean by "direct to the actual sales page... Rather than checkout..."

    Also how would you shorten it?

    I will change the button too.
     
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    #5
    I think I must have missed something here....

    Is this YOUR product or a product you're an affiliate for? I guess when I just saw that this was a review for a landing page, I automatically assumed that you created this lander for a product. With so many "energy" products in the CB marketplace, I mearly thought that you were an affiliate for one of them.

    If this is your sales page, it needs tons of work, honestly. At least hire someone for a better design and layout. It's just too cluttered, and doesn't look anything like a sales page.

    Also, take a look at your competition to see what they are doing right, and try to do it better (if you can).

    Good luck!
     
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    Madman340 Peon

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    Yeah, I'd suggest expanding on your sales page since it sure looks like you are the publisher.

    If you aren't the publisher, your affiliate link doesn't show you as the affiliate.
     
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    staffsergeantpeterson Member

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    Dam* Yes, I am the publisher... So the site looks cheap? Arggg... Sometimes I want to toss in the towel.. I threw this site together but thought it would pull through. Then again I am new to CB. The D-load and stuff works as it is functional... Maybe I'll head to elance to hire someone to push out a page...

    Little discouraged but I'll grab this one by the horns. What would you do if this was your page... How would you do it?

    Just curious. IF you guys have been in the business I'd rather hear it from folks with expirience..

    -SSgt Peterson
     
    staffsergeantpeterson, Oct 29, 2008 IP
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    seregap Active Member

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    'Don't be utility a company slave'

    you may want to fix this as well ;)
     
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    Ripped Well-Known Member

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    Also, register a separate domain for your product. The main page of your domain shows a blog with adsense. Affiliates won't want their traffic to leak out to the main page.
     
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    I moved it to Make-Solar-Panels . com

    Does this look better?
     
    staffsergeantpeterson, Nov 10, 2008 IP
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    i think its going to convert but it needs improvement
     
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    what should I improve?
     
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    #13
    The page looks good.

    The double hyphen domain......no so sure

    Try this

    advancedsolarpanels.com

    or this

    diysolarpanels.com

    diy = do it yourself

    :D
     
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    Pal Active Member

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    Correct this on your landing page:
     
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    #15
    Your opening headline is wrong too.

    Don't let utility a company steal your earned pay!

    should be

    Don't let a utility company, steal your hard earned pay!
     
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    #16
    too cluttered, color is horrible...pay a designer 20 bucks for a professional looking logo. Good idea though...keep at it
     
    phillipmarlow, Nov 10, 2008 IP
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    #17
    Unlike a lot of the folk here, I don't think it's half bad. You need to focus more on a few specific colrs and make it a bit lighter on the eyes, but past that it's well done... GET RID OF THE GREEN TEXT BLOCKS and that'll be 90% of the changes you need to make. Past that, you have pictures, lists, and everything else that make potential customers warm and fuzzy inside. Good work.
     
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    #18
    Err wrong, that comma doesn't belong *at all*.

    "Don't let a utility company steal your hard earned cash!" is probably better, cash sounds a bit more "valuable" per se, pay sounds kind of... idk, bland, boring. Just my opinion, but sure as hell that comma doesn't belong there.
     
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    GRRRRRR. I paid a dude on elance to do my LP... It's better than what it used to be... I personally think it really blows... I should just do it in plain old black and white.... Plane jane with blue links and that's it...
     
    staffsergeantpeterson, Nov 11, 2008 IP
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    I think you need to get the main content centered. The buy button looks wierd in there ..just my opinion
     
    AffiliateRefresh, Nov 11, 2008 IP