Please review WRITING

Hi there
I started a new blog and for the first time i m writing a blog in english which is not my first langauge so please can you guyz reviews these two posts and tell me if

• My writings are OK?
• can i pass my point across effectively if i am writing in this style?
• and if you suggest improvements what should i do for that

POST 1: http://www.pakblogger.com/?p=16
POST 2: http://www.pakblogger.com/?p=13

I will wait your reviews
thank you

 

I find your writing good, but English is not my native language either.
Just a small remark, your forgot the uppercase in the first sentence of the section "Advertisement type"

 

Thanks for your review .......... i will check this

 

That is sorted out
can some one else see into thi please

 

All in all your grasp of the language is much better than some I have read. Though there are a couple of things to correct in the first paragraph.

When spending money on an advertisement campaign, you should make sure that you will get the maximum out of it. The best thing is to take some time out and think about the “goal” which you want to achieve. from your advertisement campaign.(you don't need this part) Here are some things which may help maximize the results of an advertising campaign.

Small things really. Your ideas are easy to understand but the grammar is a bit off. Great start though.

 

Thank you very much for your help jeccles. I m thinking to write posts in MS Word now to check these errors what do u suggest?

 

That is a great start but remember the English language is full of paradoxes. You might have the correct spelling for a word but use it in the wrong context. Their grammar checker may help a bit, but the best help would be to have someone proof your articles for you. English is my first language and I am absolutely hopeless when it comes to proofing my own work.

 

hahah hmmm that is interesting. MS word is unable to differentiate between there and their

 

I have not used the grammar checker in a long time, but it might catch it.

Remember, computer programs are only as smart as their dumbest programmers.

Edit: Nope didn't catch it.

 

haha hmm yeah true

 

Hey Pak,
I think you write exceptionally well for someone writing in a second language. These are very impressive articles and I can see that you've already made a lot of adjustments and corrections since you originally posted. I'm sure you're picking up on the slang, nuances, and mind-bending rules and exceptions and that's probably the thing to do.

There are several small things that people fluent in english will notice in your post, but the more you ask for feedback and the more you practice, the fewer nuances will show up in your writing.

Here's a sample edit...
If you use Google analytics or some other tool to track your blog or web site traffic, make sure to compare traffic before and after campaigns. Did you achieve your ROI goal? The important thing here is to analyze traffic after the campaign has ended to check whether you experienced a sustained traffic increase or only a temporary rise during the campaign.

You're learning fast, keep writing. Great article and information by the way, thank you!
Odd Lot

 

You are so kind thank you OddLotBlog
yes, the problem is there are so many slangs in online writings that you are not sure where to go study and learn but i m very happy to find people like you who are always ready to help. I will keep on learning and writing good stuff and hopefully will have god writing skills soon....cheers