I'm not a good copy writer, so I wanna ask, how do you think, where should I improve, and if you think you can write me a good copy for my page, feel free to pm me.I just want to know, how you think about my writing.Thanks. the page is in my sig..
You are not that bad too. You MUST improve on your punctuation and grammar though. There should be no space before period. However, there must be a space after period when you start a new sentence. Also, a sales copy is good if shouts but must be consistent in its writing style Because I'm Going To Give You The Highest, fastest rebate and paying almost instantly via paypal ! You started with title caps, but turned regular after Highest. Somewhere at middle of the copy, I found this. Regards and Thanks, Oh, my name is Sameer Walia, nice to meet you...... I couldn't understand what you finished with and what you actually started off??? IMO, you should read your copy/draft 2-3 times after you are done. You may feel like editing at many points. Also, read some good grammar tutorial. All the best
thanks chilliebreeze, your inspirition was more than enough.I think I got to go and learn english again.I don't know anything about grammer.
See if you can hire somebody here to do it over for you. It shouldn't take no more than an hour. $50, if that. That header and the big red text makes the site look cheap. One thing that you should avoid is "loud text." It's too big throughout the site. Is it Times New Roman, 16 font? You should consider changing it to Georgia, 12 font. The text looks much better, it has a different look to it. Make your page just like a letter, with spurts of loud text. Break up the letter into smaller sections, and add quality pictures along the way to keep them reading. Change the gray background to a soothing shade of blue. Colors greatly influence many people's decisions. If you have any free tips, by all means give it to them. Add value to your page! There's more, MUCH more, but there is a plate of waffles calling my name.
It's grammar, not grammer, and you could start by reading The Elements of Style, www.crockford.com/wrrrld/style.html