Please Review My Step By Step System Keyword Domination

Discussion in 'Reviews' started by kellyifrah, Jun 2, 2008.

  1. #1
    Hiya,

    We have just released a guide that was not originally going to be free, but we wanted to get some feedback, so thought what the h&ck :D

    You can download it at http://www.immembership.com

    Please let us know what you think.

    It is what we use and have had some great successes in small niches.

    The feedback that the team think is the most useful will win FREE Lifetime Access when we open.

    If you have any questions you can pm me here or use the contact form on the website.

    I would also love to hear your feedback on our squeeze page :p
     
    kellyifrah, Jun 2, 2008 IP
  2. kingofsanda

    kingofsanda Peon

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    The site looks good, maybe you should list a few sites and some examples
    of some of the competitive keywords you were able to rank well for.
     
    kingofsanda, Jun 2, 2008 IP
  3. kellyifrah

    kellyifrah Guest

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    Thanks for your comments.

    The problem with showing sites is that people then steal your keywords :)

    For the launch we will have screenshots with the keywords blacked out.

     
    kellyifrah, Jun 2, 2008 IP
  4. laird

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    Typos:

    don' (4th paragraph below headline)
    baing (1st bullet point)
    layout (3rd bullet point)
    yoour (5th bullet point)

    Copywise, the offer is pretty weak and the grammatical structure makes me twinge. Where's the ultra-strong, captivating headline to draw the reader in? Where's the equally strong sub-head?

    Get a testimonial or two in there - ask for some folks to review your stuff NOW in exchange for a review that can be used on the website. Post that request here or other IM-related forums.

    I think you'd be wise to incorporate a strong header/footer graphic. Lots of wonderful LOW-COST sources exist for images (eg. $1.30/each and you really need only 1 or 2 elements).

    My opinion and 2 cents will get ya 2 cents. Hope you don't mind the review.
     
    laird, Jun 3, 2008 IP