My squeeze page - http://www.hide-us.info/freetraffic.html Any improvements I could do? Would you opt-in if you were a visitor just passing by? Thanks! Amund
I wouldn't opt in, but I'm probably not your target. As to the document itself, I think the ethos is damaged by the constant use of capitalization. The document is working too hard to create a false sense of urgency. The general arrangement is fine, but the emphasis needs some serious work. The consistency needs work too. For instance, one second you're using a lowercase "a" and the next, an uppercase "a." Pick one. The document needs a little work in the clarity department as well. Aside from the emphasis issues, it feels to "busy." Take a step back and think about the cognate strategies that are at play in your document. By the way, on a supra level, it presents fine, but you may want to play with a light background color, so your main segment pops a little. Good luck with it!
No, I wouldn't give you my e-mail address and name. Sorry. If a site won't give me more info than that, and I have to give them my address just to get more, I back out of the site.
I have to agree with some of the other comments. Keep the capitalization consistent which will make it look for professional. I may not be your target audience as I see so many of these pages, but it may convert to someone. I think it is trying to hard with too much urgency. If I could learn more (videos, pictures, testimonies if I scrolled down a bit I may be more interested. Just my 2 cents - good luck!
I personally didn't like it. Not because it is bad in itself, but because is very much like thousands others across the web. When I see words like "Easily" and "Secret" in the title, I'm instantly turned off. They are the mark of the lazy or unimaginative copywriter. To give you some alternatives, here are some quick thoughts: Every 34 minutes, your website misses 12 visitors. Claim this report to make it stop now. More traffic you want. More traffic you'll get. This is the report you must read. You'll kick yourself after reading this report. Why? Because you'll realize how much traffic you are overlooking. As for the emergency feel, you might want to back it up with a real scarcity trigger such as a deadline or max number of downloads. Additionally, you might want to change the text in the submit button to a more compelling one. Also, from a technical standpoint, it would be recommendable to blacklist disposable e-mail services such as spamgourmet. Hope this helps. Best regards, George
Quoted to highlight this. Specificity is a key selling tool, yet so many copywriters (or those doing their own stuff) fail to be specific. Make more money. Yawn. Make $2,876 more every 7 days. Interesting. Also, specificity enhances the ethos of the document. As to squeeze pages being a mistake, no they're not. Perhaps you're thinking that this is the "home page" of a site, but that's not what a squeeze page is (or is for). Or perhaps I misunderstood what you meant. Anyway, I'm not saying people don't use them incorrectly, just saying that they are a vital element for all of us who build profitable lists.
Wow...... You probably receive good traffic to your squeeze page as it says "Bandwidth Limit Exceed" right now.
Besides the "Bandwidth Exceeded" message, it looks like any lame squeeze page I'd see on the net. Nothing personal, but I don't see any value there, so no, I wouldn't opt in. Sell me on something original. Why should I opt in to your newsletter, as opposed to the thousands of other choices I have? SELL ME!!!
I think its looks good. If I was a novice visitor seeking knowledge, I might throw you my email. Try to clean it up a bit. Its too cluttered. But good job overall!
I find this style is repeated too often and makes every site seem like the same repetitious cliche. It's not what you've written that is the problem, but the layout and font selection which makes it cluttered and uninspiring. I guess sometimes words aren't enough. I will keep an eye on this thread as I'd like to see you try something a little different from 'the pack'
I like specificity as well as the other copywriters. Some good advice here. I also like headlines/subheads and copy that is written with a benefit to the audience. A quickie example" Lots of highly-targeted traffic to your site inspires conversions. Lots of conversions makes your bank account more attractive. So how do you make this wonderful thing happen? Find out how with this free report.