Review my Reviews!

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by Veej, Jan 22, 2008.

  1. #1
    Hi all!
    I'd just like to get some technique about my review technique. Just to introduce myself, I have a forum/blog and one of the features is that I review 'new' blogs for free.

    I'll include a couple of reviews I have written below - could you tell me what you think of the content and style please?

    BuyMeAFerrari.co.uk Review
    FreelancingTips.com Review

    Thanks!
     
    Veej, Jan 22, 2008 IP
  2. webgal

    webgal Peon

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    Break it up some. It's got that "sea of type" feeling that makes me click the close button. I think it's beneficial to used lots of subheads to make the reading easier and highlight the page for the reader--particularly on a website. Just my 2 cents.
     
    webgal, Jan 22, 2008 IP
  3. marketjunction

    marketjunction Well-Known Member

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    I agree. It feels too bland. Two ways to break up segments are:

    Subhead

    text text text

    OR

    This is my subhead. This is the continuation of text.

    Also, add padding (or margin) to that picture. Try 10 pixels.

    It might be over the top, but I'd like to see a sidebar with "quick facts." You could also throw in bullet points too (if the article warrants).
     
    marketjunction, Jan 22, 2008 IP
  4. Veej

    Veej Active Member

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    Ok, cheers for the suggestions guys, will implement them later on today when I'm working on the forum ;)
     
    Veej, Jan 23, 2008 IP
  5. wpdaily

    wpdaily Active Member

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    In regards to the posts image (Red Ferrari), I would suggest using the horizontal/vertical space option in WP image editor (ex.5px,5px) to make it cleaner. Just my thought:)
     
    wpdaily, Jan 23, 2008 IP
  6. Veej

    Veej Active Member

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    Thanks for your comment!
    Spacing has been used but the problem is that it is only working in IE and not Firefox, it's something we're trying to resolve.
     
    Veej, Jan 24, 2008 IP