comment on if i can be a content writer?

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by proson, Sep 10, 2007.

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    please comment my following works of "computer security"


    "BT generally is a good idea because it saves time to download a big file when internet connections are slow. However, some people out there tried to use for illegal purposes such as copyright infringed mp3, computer software, movies sharing and so on.
    Often these pieces of mp3, movies or computer software are provided in zip, rar format to save some space and speed. But again, you don’t know what pieces of software are bundled in these zips or rars files. It may be computer viruses, trojan horses or a key logger which basically can log everything you typed on your keyword and then send a report to their owners or people who let your download their software or media. Which means your password, username and other personal information may be revealed by another person that you don’t know. Therefore, next time when you see a BT site, stay away from it. (Unless it is some well established site like Open Office (software like MS office or World of War Craft, online massive multi-players role playing games)"

    I had 3+ years on computer network and system administration plus outsource technical support to some Hong Kong companies and now I wish to start a company to provide SEO services. Since SEO services are related to content and I'm thinking to provide content writing in a low price for start.

    thanks anyone to comment this article.

    p.s. you can reference of my work if you think it is useful and link it to my site on www.18AffordableWebHosting.com
     
    proson, Sep 10, 2007 IP
  2. Shyflower

    Shyflower Peon

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    #2
    You need a lot of work on grammar, flow, voice, and punctuation.
     
    Shyflower, Sep 10, 2007 IP
  3. gr8liverpoolfan

    gr8liverpoolfan Notable Member

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    #3
    You have got some work to do before calling yourself a good content writer.

    The first line itself reveals the following.
    Please comment on my following works.
    on- missing. This is just one article, therefore the use of the word works isn't justified.

    Some people might be willing to hire you ( do not know the rate that you are charging), but if you really want to work professionally, you have miles to go...
     
    gr8liverpoolfan, Sep 11, 2007 IP
  4. Taler

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    #4
    As others have said, this article is terrible... Try again. Post it here in the same thread and I'm sure a few of us will help you.

    Something you may want to try is going for greater sentence variety and grammatical sophistication.
     
    Taler, Sep 13, 2007 IP
  5. proson

    proson Well-Known Member

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    all right guys, thanks for your comment. I'm appreciated
     
    proson, Sep 17, 2007 IP
  6. KeywordsandCopy

    KeywordsandCopy Peon

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    You are on the right track, but as mentioned above, your flow needs to improve, etc. But you ll get there if you keep it up!
     
    KeywordsandCopy, Sep 17, 2007 IP
  7. proson

    proson Well-Known Member

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    all right guys. after all being an article writer is not as easy as it sounds
     
    proson, Sep 20, 2007 IP
  8. Tiggi

    Tiggi Active Member

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    #8
    The question is not whether you can be one but whether you want to do it! You need to work a lot that's obvious. If you have the guts then go for it!
     
    Tiggi, Sep 21, 2007 IP
  9. soccer-writer

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    Of course. Its not a bed of roses. Especially if your niche does not have a shelf life, like sports/soccer :p . Its challenging to come up with unique, well-written content every second day !
     
    soccer-writer, Sep 22, 2007 IP
  10. aspire

    aspire Well-Known Member

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    Puncutaion is one area where improvement is needed. Another is the flow of the article. The end of the 1st para does not very well connect to the starting lines of the 2nd para. The flow must be logical and smooth.
     
    aspire, Sep 27, 2007 IP
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    SEOBusiness Well-Known Member

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    I think you can be a writer,you can writer something on SEO.If i were the visitors i would like to take some time to read your articles.
     
    SEOBusiness, Dec 21, 2007 IP
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    Don't forget, adding a little wit and humor can go a long way to keep readers captivated.
     
    zac439, Dec 21, 2007 IP
  13. Muzammal786

    Muzammal786 Banned

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    You should write in such a way that readers find it something different and fresh
     
    Muzammal786, Dec 27, 2007 IP