Let's Write a Romatic Song

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  1. bnts

    bnts Well-Known Member

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    #21
    We have such a close similarity in taste my friend... I also write many poems. If you come here I can show you my certificates that I won in poem writing competitions. I have few of them published in our college Magz also last year ;):D
     
    bnts, Jan 6, 2007 IP
  2. Correctus

    Correctus Straight Edge

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    #22
    Great man I hope we do enjoy when we meet.

    Khoob Jamega rang jab mill baithenge teen yaar
    Aap, main aur.. Orange Juice :D (As I told you earlier I don't do Daru :p)

    IT
     
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  3. bnts

    bnts Well-Known Member

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    #23
    yet another great poem ;)

    Well, even I have left Daru..New Year Resolution ;)
     
    bnts, Jan 6, 2007 IP
  4. jdR!pper

    jdR!pper Peon

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    #24
    Hey correctus, you're really enjoying this thread aren't you?? :D
     
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  5. Grafstein

    Grafstein Peon

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    #25
    When Ever I Look Into Your Eyes
    All I See is My Cheat and Lies.

    I remember the first time we met
    We went down to subway and had a baguette
    You went in my car,we went really far
    reaching the state border by two.
    then the first kiss,found all i needed was you.....
     
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  6. Correctus

    Correctus Straight Edge

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    #26
    Oh yes I am enjoying this thread :)

    My poem on Daaru and a Darua: (For the English readers, Daru means Liquor and Darua means Liquor addict)

    Daaru

    Aaj jo uthaya pyaala daru ka din me chauti baar
    Saath dene se keeya hamara, haatho ne inkaar
    Dekha hamne ye manzar, kya ye thha daaru ka vaar?
    Ya fir kisi tarah se shaayad ham jindagi se gaye thhe haar?
    Jo bhi ho ye daaru ka bhi tha apne kism ka aetbaar
    Hak bhi banta thha daaru kaa, aakhir saalo se thhe ham uske yaar
    Daaru ko dekar keeya gunah shaayad hamne, itna saara pyaar
    Dil toh keeya kee aaj hi nikal dein kamzarf par saara gubaar
    Jaane kaisi aaj padi thi daru aur hamare beech daraar?
    Par phir hamne raah pakdi khatiya kee jo padi thhi bahaar
    Achanak kya hooaa jaane kee gire ham jordaar
    Aur aawaaj sun hamari dahne kee padosi aa gaye hajaar
    Kuch ne kaha luchcha, toh kuch ne kameena gawaar
    Kisi ne nahi samjha aakhir hamare dil kee pukaar?
    Naa ban rahaa thaa chalte naa uthate aakhir maan hi li hamne haar
    Jaane ye nasha thha yaa ho chale thhe ham sharaabi laachaar
    Hamdardo ne uthaya aur yaad dilaakar keeya khabardaar
    Bhaijaan sambhlo ab gaye purane din, ab hain aap Cancer ke Shikaar


    Oh and btw Grafstein, bro add another line after the fifth one it doesn't fit perfectly right now, otherwise its awesome man :)

    IT
     
    Correctus, Jan 6, 2007 IP
  7. Raj Kumar

    Raj Kumar Prominent Member

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    #27
    Correctus Now you Are totally involve In This Thread :p, also i read all your posts in this thread :)
    realy great poem & Songs :)
     
    Raj Kumar, Jan 7, 2007 IP
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    login Notable Member

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    #28
    Short translation for the english readers:

    "I am drunk and I will be drunk forever
    but if you would be mine I could save my liver" :D :D :D
     
    login, Jan 7, 2007 IP
  9. Correctus

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    #29
    The only romantic angle in that poem is between the glass of liquor and the drinker.

    IT
     
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    #30
    That was a great idea :D Ask Dp members for help on writing a love song:rolleyes:

    Some bright sparks on this forum ;)
     
    Emperor, Jan 7, 2007 IP
  11. ehsen

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    #31
    Correctus you are awesome. I just started this thread for fun, songwriting isn't my thing. I am more interested in Acting.

    By the way if any one turn it into a tune (a real song) that will be so cool.
     
    ehsen, Jan 7, 2007 IP
  12. ehsen

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    #32
    I am officially the worst poet in the history of mankind (as rated by my parents, teachers and friends).

    When i was in school I always used to get A+ in every subject except literature (poetry crap). Even now i almost completed my college education, Often I don't understand the poetry properly.

    One thing is for sure. "POETRY DOES WORK WITH GIRLS"
     
    ehsen, Jan 7, 2007 IP