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Discussion in 'General Marketing' started by YujinTan, May 26, 2021.

  1. #1
    I wrote

    A visitor from USA has just bought Digital Product 20 min ago

    looks fine?
     
    YujinTan, May 26, 2021 IP
  2. Spoiltdiva

    Spoiltdiva Acclaimed Member

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    #2
    "A visitor from the U.S.A. has just bought a digital product 20 minutes ago."
     
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    #3
    It may be fine, but, to say that they "just bought" and then "20 minutes ago" doesn't sound right to me, does 20 minutes count as "just"?
    What is the timeframe that "just" counts for?

    When I see the word just, I would assume its within the past 5 minutes max, otherwise I would put the time.
     
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    #4
    thanks for these correction hmm the front part insert the? like a A Visitor from the Italy? I find it no need put the right?

    hmmm sound logic so should be 5min max
     
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    #5
    side note, the notification will show 3 times per page from different countries
    does it looks right? and yes the time I put max 5 min sound logic?
     
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    YujinTan, May 26, 2021 IP
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    #6
    Ok guys I repharse again seem ok?

    A Customer from USA has purchased a digital product 30min ago
     
    YujinTan, May 29, 2021 IP
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    I think it should be "from the USA".
    Other than that, sounds good to me.
     
    jaymi, May 29, 2021 IP
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    #8
    Your grammar remains incorrect. You need the article (part of speech) "the" in front of "USA" as someone else has mentioned. Beyond that, you would be better off dropping the word "has" (which in this case implies more immediacy than 30 minutes ago.) Just say:

    A Customer from the USA purchased a digital product 30 minutes ago.
     
    jrbiz, May 29, 2021 IP
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    #9
    Thanks guys again for the correction, i done the correction.

    at first i read sound weird is like " from the Spain " but don't sound weird when read " from the USA "

    now i know proper english is add The
     
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    Well, it depends, to say "the USA" is correct, but to say "the Spain" is not, you would just say "Spain".
    There should either be some sort of condition that will output either "the" or nothing.

    Or, you can try and reword the sentence to suit both situations.
     
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    I got it , just Someone in,
     
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    YujinTan, May 29, 2021 IP
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    #12
    I put like this

    Someone in South korea purchase a digital product 5 min ago
     
    YujinTan, May 30, 2021 IP
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    #13
    The word "purchase" is in the present tense in your sentence above. However, "5 min ago" is in the past. Therefore, you should use the past tense of the word or "purchased" in your statement.
     
    jrbiz, May 30, 2021 IP
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    #14
    yea ,
    thanks
     
    YujinTan, May 30, 2021 IP