Looking for Help with My Sales Letter

Discussion in 'General Marketing' started by KenrickC, Sep 19, 2010.

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    Hello fellow IMers! I wanted to let you know about my new quickstart guide on Mobile Marketing called "Mobile Marketing: Hype or Highly Profitable?". I really need your help! The site is live and the guide is ready for download. But, I want some constructive criticism...

    I was hoping some of you would take a minute to look over the sales copy and give me some ideas. I have no doubt about the way people are going to react to the wealth of information in the guide. However, sales copy isn't my strong suite...

    As you'll see from the site, the guide only costs $7, which I'm hoping will make it an easy sale. I also offer 100% commissions to anyone who wants to sell the guide to help me build my contact list, the guide has the full details...

    Thank you in advance for your comments. I love having a place where innovative thinkers can get together and share their ideas and projects. Good luck in your projects, and look forward to reading your thoughts...

    Two versions for split testing on the eBook covers and color schemes:
    h**p://bit.ly/mmhhpblk
    Code (markup):
    h**p://bit.ly/bqTiP
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    Replace the "**" with "tt" The links are bit.ly so I can track forum respone, but I do own the site and I wrote the eBook.

    Thanks again!
     
    KenrickC, Sep 19, 2010 IP
  2. JoesMillion

    JoesMillion Peon

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    Where can we download the book for free?
     
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    r u asking us to buy your book?
     
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    I get the feeling we're being indirectly spammed by asking for feedback. I would never give feedback like this without seeing the product being sold.

     
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    r u asking us to buy your book?
     
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    First I'm asking you to critique my sales letter. If the copy sucks then nobody will buy the book. I am asking for legitimate help. I know that the info in the book is good. But nobody else will if I can't convince them with the copy. Before you ask for a free copy, maybe you should offer some helpful suggestions. I don't mind giving the book out to people who may be able to sell it well, but one thing at a time. First I want a page that is going to convert, because that's how we can all make money.

    If you think its spam, then don't bother. But come on. Who Spams for $7 products?

    The second link is h**p://bit.ly/mmhhpblue the other one was messed up by bit.ly.
     
    KenrickC, Sep 20, 2010 IP
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    Without seeing the product, it would be mute to offer any advice. Great copy requires knowing the product.


     
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    The body is too long. It needs to be broken up with more subtitles. Also telling people what they'll get out of using it in bullet form is often an effective way to summarize value. The mind can consume bullet points easier then paragraphs.
     
    Andrew-tbkCreative, Sep 20, 2010 IP