Hi guys, I have this CB affililiate webside a onepage landing page. I have it for a while and so far made me only 1 sale, and since its now getting organic traffic... I thought today to redisign it. now I need your expert reviews what do you think. chicken coop plans
graphics need to be "tweaked", but otherwise might be sufficient for the audience. That big BLOCK of text is bad. You a do not appear to WANT TO SELL, instead you give irrelevant advice like "face the chicken coop towards the sun"..etc..etc...THEY GET THAT IN THE BOOK! Try to SELL and point out why they want your book, whats the advantages of buying your book/plans etc..etc.... this sales letter as it is right now is simply not attractive and wont make people buy your book, IMO.
thanks guys, I will make the changes graphics changes soon. meanwhile what do you think about the content now
Hi Cri8bat, That site of yours just isn't up to the job I'm afraid. The page is far too short, it's simiar to a squeeze page, and your "review" is really weak in content. You should be telling the visitor that there are "5 great tips that will ensure their own chicken coop will be the best in their neighbourhood" or "the 3..." etc. There really is nothing on the site that is going to get anyone excited enough to buy the product. Chronic Tinnitus
- the header is a mess, could be desgined better - You do not have W3C validation in html document, and having a w3c CSS button on the site have no point, when Your html doesn't get validated. - typography , headers should be bigger also too big margins for text - the right side of the background is not done properly and it looks bad I would invest in better landing page
Although you can't do much with the domain name, you can, however go with a more SEO friendly phrase, "How to Build a Chicken Coop" in your page, where you have it bolded below the header and above the copy. The phrase "How to Construct a Chicken Coop" hold a lot less searches (480 per month), whereas the term "How to Build a Chicken Coop" gets 14,800. Do yourself a big favor and check out the Google Keyword Tool and see for yourself Build some of the higher-ranking keywords into your copy and you'll see better results. As far as the copy goes... It might do you some good to have a copywriter give you a review. You might be able to get a free review if you go over to Bruce Wedding's copywritingboard.com. Many of the copywriters there like to help out, but be prepared to get your feeling hurt a little (depending on who is doing the critique). If you plan on writing for yourself in the future, you might be better off reading some books and articles on what it takes to write good, solid eyeball-grabbing copy. I'm short on time right now or I'd give you a little more help. If I can, I'll see about coming back later and giving some more advice. Sorry. I'm unable t post links at this time. You may have to look these two sites up on Google.
its a little better now, but still too much text at the beginning, and the picture is too far down. Move that cover image up (could be bigger also), and maybe reword that first "block" of text like DO YOU WANT TO BUILD A CHICKEN COOP - BUT DON'T KNOW WHERE TO START? DO YOU WANT TO LEARN HOW YOU CAN EASILY BUILD YOUR DREAM CHICKEN COOP? GET A STEP-BY-STEP GUIDE HOW YOU CAN BUILD A CHICKEN COOP - EVEN IF YOU REALLY DONT HAVE ANY DIY SKILLS! Things like that think about it: You start your site with "Anyone can build a chicken coop" <--- i dont think its good as you have it right now, make it like "Anyone can build a chicken coop easily with our easy to follow step-by-step plans" Better even: TALK TO THE PEOPLE: "YOU can easily build a chicken coop with our easy to follow step-by-step guide" Point out what's so good about your guide, advantages RIGHT AWAY in bold letters on your page. Anyway its already better than what you had before.
good point thank you! I made the changes would you care to re-review it pls PS: what do you think about the graphics, does it need major modifications?
As seen on your sales page: If you know how to read (well if you are reading this then I guess you know...), cut timber Might wanna use lumber or boards instead of timber. While timber is an acceptable usage, it conjures up images of a raw log for Americans, and possibly Canadians....not sure. No idea what term they use in the UK. But, considering that it is a how-to site, you wanna make this pitch run as smoothly as possible and not get the reader hung up on words like this. If someone thinks they are going to be cutting down trees to build this thing, they are going to vacate your site. May seem minor, but points like these, in aggregate, will reduce conversions. To have a place where your chicken can grow and produce their eggs! With absolute no fear of ferocious predators whatsoever! Maybe add, ferocious predators, like coyotes, raccoons, fox, dogs, and even the neighbor's mean cat! This way they start to personally relate to the pitch more. Almost everyone has a cat or dog on the lose in their area looking to cause trouble. Then there will be people who have coyotes, fox, or raccoons. Think about words that evoke more emotion than you currently have, such as, protect your investment, protect your family's nourishment, keep your chickens happy, well-rested, and clean. If you clean up the format below the header there, it is a decent looking site with a nice background and header.
thank you so much for helping me out here I really apreciate your help, I made some changes as you mention, if possible a final review best regards, Smit
I love this design. It is clean and simple. Most impotently, the length of the page is not too long and there is no pop-up menu us used in this page. You visitor can get a straight foreword information about your product. Fonts are looking good. The W3C icons in the footer has some problem in case of hover effect. I am using FF 3.6.3.
Yeah still room for advancement. Redesign the headers and give some more value content .... and more content. Make some top lists and show WHY they MUST have this book.
The page isn't bad, just something about it that screams out "amateur" It will be great once you fix all the flaws. I really wish you good luck and can't wait to see what your final touch is
Is there any way you can get an image of the exact house that they will be building with your book? Or multiple images if there are multiple plans? If I were in the market for plans, I'd want to know what yours looks like, and what the dimensions of the finished product are going to be. Some energy products were horrible when they first came out, and they still sold, but I believe the more polished you make this now, the more success you will have. You can also actually deliver on these promises too, because you are just providing plans for a chicken coop, which is a reality. Solving someone's energy problems with an e-book is not even an honest sell, and they still convert well, so if you truly deliver on your sales page and in your book, the product will sell much better.