My personal website quote [Please comment]

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  1. #1
    Hi all,

    I am thinking to have the following statements as my website quote:

    The greatest wealth is Health
    The fastest processor is Mind
    The most expensive asset is Knowledge

    OR this

    The greatest wealth is Health
    The fastest processor is our Mind
    The most expensive asset is your Knowledge

    Do you see any problems in the sentence construction or logic?
    Rep will be added to constructive feedback, thanks :)
     
    KC TAN, Sep 1, 2006 IP
  2. Crouton

    Crouton Guest

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    Maybe switch the focus of the three sentences around, and get rid of the interior rhyme:

    Health is your greatest fortune,
    The Mind your fastest processor,
    And Knowledge your most valuable asset.

    The only "flaw" I see, is that the first and third statements focus on wealth, while the second focuses on computing. Have each statement tell a different metaphor, or have all three follow the same one.
     
    Crouton, Sep 2, 2006 IP
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  3. KC TAN

    KC TAN Well-Known Member

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    Great advices, Crouton :)

    I agree that I should focus on different aspects. Do you have any suggestions on the 'Knowledge' statement? REP Added :D
     
    KC TAN, Sep 2, 2006 IP