Please review my 3D animation (contains a bit violent language)

hi guys, I'm new at 3D animations, could you review my 3d animation please?
1. the dialogue
2. the sound
3. the animation
4. whatever comes to your minds

don't worry, I take critism to improve my skills. Thanks a lot guys

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iiVtxiebLHk

or this (the intro):

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=r0RpP1PmI-A

I made this for my game, but I believe more opinions will only help me to make it better

 

I think you have done really well! How long did it take you and was it hard to do?

 

That's pretty damn good!

 

That's pretty sweet, the design of the characters and the animation has been done well, the only thing i dislike is the characters voices.

 

thanks I use a computer generated voice because my friends' voice kind of light and seems too young to voice the characters, and I've been doing this all by myself (except for my girlfriend voicing the don's mistress)

thanks It took me almost 3 hours to do the 'Rescue the Don' cutscene. It took me like 5 hours to do the 'Welcome to Indomafia' cutscene because I had to create all the characters, faces, voices, costumes, roads, but thanks to google 3D Warehouse, I didn't need to create the buildings, I download the buildings from there and resize and restructure them and use them in my cutscene animations

It's not that hard, but very time consuming and frustating on doing the motions (if you pay attention to the intro, the don's neck is missing, I screwed up his neck in photoshop )

thanks any suggestions?

I make lots of cutscenes like that for my game here but I need people like you guys who are interested in designs, graphics and multimedia to give me inputs so I can improve them as I am creating more cutscenes for upper levels, every level, fight and action has their own cutscenes, that's why your inputs will be priceless to me

 

your animation is really great what software do you use i know about something to about 3d studio max if you have time to chat me on gtalk i really like that kind of work it is my best choice for part time. I spent time only 3d for part time nothing else.

my gtalk address.

 

Awesome work buddy, everything is fine but the voice talent needs improvement. Keep it up and keep on sharing your works. Good Luck!

 

Well done, Everything was great except for the characters voice.

 

It's nice. Maybe you can make it better in the future. But for now, i think that's nice.

 

thanks guys, your input is very valuable for me to improve the animations

those animations are for my game here:

IndoMafia

what do you guys think of the design?

 

The animation is interesting and you had done a good start.But the characters voice is not perfectly suited.

 

yep, that's a computer generated voice, I wanna ask my friends to be voice actors, but they kinda suck

 

Too quiet for me. I hate having to overly adjust volume.

 

if it's too loud, also not good?

 

lol, very nice. love it.