New Contest, PLENTY OF CASH, ASAP

Hi,

I have tried this in the past and came up short. The designs submited were not up to par, to be honest.

Here is what I need:

A sales letter, all the HYPE, that flows nicely


http://tinyurl.com/74q3kc


Please feel free to contact me with any questions that you may have.

I do need this page fully coded.

PAYMENT:
A WINNER WILL 110% BE PICKED WITHIN 48 HOURS AND PAID $150.00 VIA PAYPAL

Thanks


Domain:
Portablebaronline dot com

Picture # 1
Picture # 2


Text:
These bars are proudly made in the US.

Great for Caterers, Hotels, Country Clubs, Golf Clubs, Restaurants, Night Clubs…

Over 2500 units sold World Wide

We ship within 24 hours

Watch how easy it is to setup and break down:
Video

Not convinced yet?
We use these bars ourselves; we are one of the largest off premise caterers in South Florida

Picture #3

These bars are customizable. Within 48 hours, we can custom design a logo for your corporate client ( a small fee applies).
Picture 4

Our affiliates sell these bars for as much as $4,000.00

For a limited time only, $2,995.00 (designer: please cross this), $2,497.00

This includes shipping nationwide

Great value, great looking bars, great support if needed

We are available 24/7 at (561)-XXX-XXXX or (561)-XXX-XXXX

Any questions, please feel free to contact us at:

 

Here is part of the site ... if you like this then you will like the rest too. Anything can be changed on request.

 

@ Imhawk:

I like it, just think the text font should be more "in your face" ...

does it make sense?

I like it

 

Font of the header or actual text in the letter?
Should I bold it and make it bigger?

thanks

 

both maybe

 

Like that?

 

honestly, I hate the text, it looks childish...

 

Ok I've changed font and its color. What about now?



If you dislike something at least tell what part and what exactly you dont like. I can't read minds ... there is no need to be mean.

 

I am not being mean at all, lol
hope u don't take it the wrong way...

This is nice, but not the "wow" I am after
you are the designer, you tell me what works, different colors, styles...

Thanks again, still looking

 

i'll try to submit something

 

Will have something later tonight.

 

will make my entry soon!

 

deadline please...

 

Here's my try. Not Coded Yet, But will do if you have selected me as winner!

 

very pretty, I like it a lot

please keep in mind that the winner will have to agree to add additional text and pictures before coding it

I will let this run for another 24 hours

ending time: Wednesday 06/24 at 3:00 PM EST

Thank U all and look forward to some great designs

 

Am I out yet?

 

Sorry for double post (DP lagged)

 

nobody is out, I just found the other design more eye candy

 

Here is my entry! Feedback Please. Changes will be done according to your feeback!