I would move the image of the ecover up a little higher on the page, but the design is very nice. I would also take out the false sense of urgency with the "next 17 people" phrase. Most people know you're lying when you post something like that. And I'd take the email off the site unless you enjoy getting spam...or at least put some spaces in it so the spam bots don't gobble it up.
It looks like all the others: Lame, amateurish. Sorry, you asked. Take out the yellow highlight. Take out that ridiculous "secret" word. Everybody and their brother uses that word. Only dumb people would fall for that. It is lame. You also have grammar errors. Squeeze pages do not work. They never have. And this one will especially not work. Why? You have given them nothing to get them to want to hand you over their e-mail address. Example: Tell me why I should give you mine??? Saying: "I can show you how to make at least $1,000 a month" is not enough. Give your visitors free samples, tips from your "system." Put in MORE info on that page! A lot of people do not like them because, "why do I have to give you my address, just so I can see your site?!" Such squeeze pages should be called "squeeze out," since so many leave. Turn it into a sales page, but talk to your visitors like a human being, like one friend showing another friend something you have. Put yourself in that mindset. Until then, you will not succeed with this.
I would suggest making a legitimate page with news and real content. What you have there is a poorly designed sales page that everyone, their cousin and their grandma use. Edit: I need to learn to read, you did write it was a squeeze page.
kindly highlight areas you felt the page was poorly done.otherwise my conversion rate is now at 30% up from 12%.your earlier post wasn't clear.communicate don't just talk.
Wow, that is much better. See what I mean? It still needs some touches, to give it more of an appealing, professional look, but this is better than the first one.
It screams "danger" to me... or at the very least, "amateur". My first impression is either of someone young and naive who doesn't want to work for a living or someone who is older and out to scam me. I think I'm just sick of these "snake-oil salesman-like" squeeze pages.
The Fact You Title Your Thread In Caps Has Made Me Not Even Want To Visit Your Page. Caps Is The Internet Equivalent Of Shouting.
This is a wonderful opinion The things mentioned are unanimous and needs to be appreciated by everyone mark123
pretty simple man, i didn't realize you wanted it to look that way. its nice that it's getting good conversions, i would suggest making a more legitimate website if you want a long term solution.
It's pretty good but I would recommend that you put your opt in form in the middle not on the left. You can also put the video on top of the page, put some text underneath and then your opt in box. The rest of the text and your picture will be below. Your choice. Whatever you do, make sure that you measure your conversion rate and then keep testing until you figure out the best layout Hope that helps
Nice. I would chunk down the paragraphs more and use more bullet points. The text might a tad too much for me, but if you want to keep it, I'd get in at least opt-in form above the fold. Maybe even get the video above the fold too. Great job for getting that going!! The hardest part for most is just to get the darn thing up.
Here is my honest review of your squeeze page: Missing the most important element "Benefit Driven Headline" Your Opt-In is invisible Way too complicated. Way too long No clear call to action. Squeeze pages, in order to be effective have to be dead simple. There is too much text on your page with too much blah blah. Here is an example of highly converting Sqeeze page: http://rs971.speedypaycheck.com/ Notice how simple and to the point it is. As much as this offer is probably a scam, I guarantee you it converts in thousands... Why? Because it's dead simple, concise, clear and screams a benefit in its headline right in your face! Your prime space is wasted. You have to have a benefit driven headline instead of :"Acme People Search Review." That does absolutely NOTHING for conversions. Where's your opt-in at? Any high converting squeeze page out there will NEVER have their opt-in buried under a sea of text. Put it right at the top where it's highly visible. Where's your call to action? On your page there really is no clarity of what you want your user to do. Click here will not work in 2009 as it used to in 2003. You have to really give a customer an incentive to drop their e-mail address there these days.
I would format it a little bit better. I would definately cahnge the font to something a little smoother and maybe space out the lines a little bit also.
To put it simply it looks like it was made by an ametur, simple design changes will make it look far more proffessional, start by getting rid of that horrible red title and get a different colour scheme for the whole page and that one is not attractive at all.
BAM! I think AlexK pretty much hit every nail on the head there! Important points -> Benefit Driven Headline - Give an example of how much money they can make -> Way too much info - Squeeze pages should be short you want them to fill in their information not read a book -> The opt-in box should be beside the video and on the first fold of the page with an incentive - "Start Earning $51981651981 a Month Now With My Unique System and 1 To 1 Help. Just Fill Out Your Details Below"
Why did you take down the second version? With the exception of the video added, this one looks worse. Take out the black background. Most people do not like dark sites. If they do not like a site, they will not buy. Women, especially, do not like dark sites. I do not know what you exactly mean by your "search-engine program." Do your other visitors??? This reviewer of your explains it, but it is not really that well explained. Besides, your visitors should immediately know, without having to read a whole lot of text first. Talk to them like they are idiots, or, like children. That way you will be more certain they will understand what is going on. Also put in bullets. There is too much space bewteen the two. Besides, who is Morris Gitonga? ... And why should I listen to him? Maybe that angle works for you, I don't know. There should not be a semicolon there. It should be either a ...... or :. Work on the grammar anyway. Take that out. No reason to state it twice, which you have done. Besides, it should be on the bottom (where you have it), AFTER you sell them on the idea. It does not look good. Try Arial Narrow, bold, 24 font size, color code E8,3A,00 (a darker, more elegant shade of red.) I would also change the title to something else. I can't think of any, since I do not fully undertand what your program is about. The look of it does not look good either. Think about taking it out entirely anyway. . Take out the black background, and think about having the middle cell, where your text and video are, bleed into the top and bottom of your site, and then turn your border lines to either a light gray (D4,D4,D4), a semi-dark shade of red (E8,3A,00) or a different shade of blue, like, say, steel blue (46,82,B4). Push your video to the right, and wrap your sales pitch around it. Like a magazine article that has a picture to the right. That way it looks better, they can read your pitch, and, if they decide to, click on your video right then and there. Think about changing your sales pitch text to Georgia, 12 font. It looks much better. It gives the site more of a style. There should be space in between some of the paragraphs. Example of one that is not: Then, and only then should you put in your opt-in form. Sell them with a lot of free tips, examples, samples, sales talk that is partially in bullets, and whatnot, and, if at all possible, pictures. THEN ask them to fill it out. lbrg got it right the first time. Make it a sales page, AND a newsworthy, real content page. Be different!
Hello,i took the whole page down and came up with this one.kindly comment onit.You have been of so much help.