Looking For Sensible Constructive Reviews

Discussion in 'ClickBank' started by PHAZ, May 11, 2009.

  1. #1
    Like I said - Sensible. Haters/Flamers will not put me down :)

    The full case study has been documented on NC: http://forums.nichechoppers.com/mar...ated-natural-sleep-remedies-watch-unfold.html

    I'm looking for some advice/reviews about my sales page:

    http://www.naturalsleepingremedies.com

    This product will be launching within the next few weeks, but first, I'm giving you all a heads up, and looking for some reviews.

    What do you like?

    What don't you like?

    Does the pitch read good?

    All that sort of stuff.

    The affiliate section is NOT YET finished - So don't start moaning about that - I will not be done for another couple of weeks.

    Cheers guy n gals,

    Ash.
     
    PHAZ, May 11, 2009 IP
  2. bl4ckmaN^

    bl4ckmaN^ Well-Known Member

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    Looks really awesome, don't even know what to suggest :D

    Perhaps more testimonials, but with happy faces, not just plain text?
     
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  3. PHAZ

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    Lol thanks Steve, glad you could pull yourself away from gaming to help a fellow choppa :)

    Thanks for your advice :) It's noted!
     
    PHAZ, May 11, 2009 IP
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    inzpiration Active Member

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    LOL well it does looks amazing Ash, congratulations bro, really, I'm happy for you. Hope you can share later your testing results with us. Everything looks cool. Perhaps just one thing I think that is making noise in my head. your bonus product says:

    Well thinking like someone that sleeping problems, I don't think I'd like the secrets and tips to "Sleep less" even if that's going to give me more energy. If that's what I was looking for then I'd search for something to boost my energy levels. I understand this is just a bonus, but for some people this bonus might become useless and irrelevant meaning that it's like if it didn't exist at all. So maybe a different bonus on relaxation or whatever would be more useful... for your conversions as well. That's just my opinion.

    But apart from that, everything looks amazing.

    Cheers!
     
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  5. SirKhan

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    Great to see this here too ;) Awesome looking site, well done!
    My only suggestion (and it's really just that) you could cloak the order link to something like xy.com/order.html as others do it looks more professional! :)
    GL!
     
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  6. PHAZ

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    Thanks Inz - I'll certainly look around for something else I can offer as a bonus! Noted :)

    Good idea :) Implemented it already to order.php - Cheers.
     
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    Good design...I recommend the following

    1. Add Pics for testimonials. (videos even better!)

    2. Add more credibility for author. (She is a Dr. of what exactly?)

    3. Add more credibility to the problem. (add quotes from major publications about sleeping problems)

    4. Ensure the reader they will get the product immediately....even if it's 2AM. (see appropriate for your audience)

    Good luck!
     
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  8. PHAZ

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    Cheers - A couple of people have said that - I'll get some up soon.

    Sure - I'll add a few bits in the bio.

    Thanks - I think I get what you mean :D

    I've got 'The best thing is, you can download this guide, even at 3am!' under the first order button! ;)

    Cheers for the feedback!
     
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    I don't get the background, it is a little distracting.
    Your "This guide will teach you how to:" - the text needs to be bigger.

    Other than that, let me know when it releases, I will promote it.
     
    BlogSalesman, May 11, 2009 IP
  10. PHAZ

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    Cheers. Yeah I think maybe I should change the background to either:

    1/ The website address style background you see on some products
    2/ A different picture.

    Any idea's anyone?

    I have just changed the "This guide will teach you how to:" text.

    Ash.
     
    PHAZ, May 11, 2009 IP
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    I was thinking the same thing. I would word it as "more effective sleep" or "more powerful sleep" or something. "How to sleep better and have more energy," maybe.
     
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  12. inzpiration

    inzpiration Active Member

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    Precisely! ;) Ash! There you have it! no need to find another bonus product, just re-write the title of that product.
     
    inzpiration, May 11, 2009 IP
  13. PHAZ

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    Cheers Boys :) I'll do that soon!
     
    PHAZ, May 12, 2009 IP
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    PHAZ,
    You had done an excellent job for web design and sales copy, but as far as domain or the product name is concern it really don't appeal me.

    Instead of http://www.naturalsleepingremedies.com/ if it would naturalsleepingsecret.com this might have more brand value than the other. The word remedies making the product common.Compare to, the word secret can create more curiosity in the mind of viewer.

    That's my point of view, Nothing personal.
     
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    Yes, the domain name could be much better. The present domain looks like a general keyword.
     
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    Cheers - I appreciate your comments :)

    I understand what your saying, and I like the idea of adding curiosity to the product. It's noted, and we'll see how it goes. Maybe I'll test both to see if conversions vary. But please read my reply to the quote below too.

    Thanks Markov,

    The reason I chose this domain, is mainly because it describes the product exactly, and because it IS a general keyword, and quite a well researched one, so first position shouldn't be a problem. That's the way I see it, but I appreciate your feedback :)

    Keep it all coming boys and girls :)

    Cheers,

    Ash.
     
    PHAZ, May 12, 2009 IP
  17. PHAZ

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    Ok, So I've just been approved on CB.

    Final tweaks, and I will process all your comments, then it's time to finish the affiliate zone, and we have lift off :)

    Good times.
     
    PHAZ, May 13, 2009 IP
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    PHAZ, Jul 3, 2009 IP