Opinions on my sales copy

[grafixster]

Greets and thanks for looking!

Was hoping to achieve a few constructive critics or praises about my first attempt at a sales page. Myself and a friend worked on this for what seemed to be forever. You can take a peek at it here.

One problem I have off the bat is that I've read it a million times and now it all just sits there on the page.

I'm shooting for the same concepts as Dan Kennedy and the like have in their books and etc.

Any info would be appreciate, thx.

[Traffic-Bug]

http://www.infordesk.com/marketing_letter.php

have a look at this how-to for writing sales letters, business marketing letters, sales pages, squeeze pages. etc.etc.

[grafixster]

Right,

Although I haven't seen that site (and thanks for the info), I've done the books, webinars, runs through clickbank sites for research and etc. I've passed the how-to stage and was looking more for input on the final before the big push.

Thanks again

Originally Posted by Traffic-Bug

http://www.infordesk.com/marketing_letter.php

have a look at this how-to for writing sales letters, business marketing letters, sales pages, squeeze pages. etc.etc.