I sell a guide for a popular video game (World of Warcraft). I was directed to this forum as the correct place to get suggestions on my sales copy. http://wowgoldguide.getdigitalinfo.com I look forward to your comments.
The first thing you should fix is the typo in the title: "as fast and as legally..." As for the copy itself, it does the job. Relatively short, to the point and convincing. Congrats there. What you should work on is the perception of the sales letter format. Your target demographic isn't particularly known for enjoying sales letters, so modifying the template and removing the "letter" references (basically making it look more like a conventional site) can work wonders on your conversion ratio. I hope this helps. Best regards, George