Couple of sites I've made recently - Feedback please!

[Thomas U]

Here's some sites I've recently designed, check them out and give me some feedback! One of them is a huge site that I'm still re-designing and another one is just one page.

1. http://www.excessvoice.com
2. http://www.herbalvolcanovaporizer.com

[npnhome]

Excellent work, I like it!

[Bosque]

Your second site is funny. I have never seen that product before. Your keyword density is good and it doesn’t seem repetitive to read.

[Lhlalyam]

Hello Mr. Vancouverite!

Good to see another person from the West Coast in the DP population. I have to say, I was quite intimidated by reviewing your site, Excess Voice. You seem to have quite a few years of website experience under your belt.

I'll do my best... in terms of what I see with your website. And hopefully it just may help you.

My Review - Excess Voice

Logo
Needs work. I think a company like this deserves an awesome logo. Especially since your home page has a page rank of 6. Good time to treat yourself.

I am no designer myself, but I've had my fair share of designers. I like to recommend a fellow DP member, Spirit of 1970 (http://forums.digitalpoint.com/showthread.php?t=475194). I have no affiliation with him what so ever. I just strongly believe in promoting those people who work hard, provide something beyond a persons expectations and is reasonably priced.

He did a template for me. If you would like to see it... please pm me.

Navigation
I find the top navigation and left side navigation quite repetitious. I'd recommend that you keep the left side navigation and use the top area for a new header design.

I also find the Home button confusing. When I click on it... it brings me to the Free Download page... it doesn't take me to the home page... or is this the home page?

SEO
Not that my SEO is up to par... but I think that you could really use your title page for key word searches. Instead of having your domain name first.... try reverse it...

My Sample for your Home Page
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Thats my review for Excess Voice

Review - Herbal Volcano Vaporizer

This is a very quick review. The site seems to be a template for this product. I like it... simple and clean... and provides all the information you need. What I didn't like was the order page... I expected to see more of your site... and not one for an affiliate site... but this is only my opinion... and it seems to promote Cannabis... not sure whether this is the medical cannabis or illegal...

My quick thoughts.

Hope that helps.
Respectfully,
Lhlalyam

[Kostyak]

Simple and clean, looks like lots other...

[mdbradle]

Hard to follow Lhlalyam and his assessment. However, my 2 cents:

- agree on the logo...could be a lot better. Use DP and offer up $10 for a new logo, or to trade some ad space
- Overall the layout and content is extremely basic. This might be by design, and I wouldn't suggest going nuts...but there might be a happy middle whereby you get a few more graphics out there.

[mdbradle]

Last review for ExcessVoice. This one for Herbal Volcano:

- Simple site, stick to that when you're done as it is a strong positive
- Overall seems to be good and get after what you are looking for
- Only nit-picky thing would be to make sure that your header box that the title and picture are in are the same width at the table in the body
- One more thing...could use some professional help with the logo.

[Thomas U]

Thanks to all your replies!!

Excess Voice is my Dad's site - Nick Usborne, I just did the coding and designing.

And the Volcano Vaporizer can be used for any herb, including cannabis I suppose.

[dotWdot]

Second site looks good - getting much success with it?

first site is also good - would recommend putting the chicklets on the right more condensed, because people looking for them know what to look for :D

[AngelicaSofia05]

First site looks good. Very helpful for lots of writers and copywriters. The free download is a nice touch, plus the newsletter lets your readers know that they can get good stuff without having to pay.

[AngelicaSofia05]

Oh yeah, about the second site. Is this real? Kinda reminds me of hookah or something, or is it a new trend in aromatherapy? Pretty cool :)

[Thomas U]

The Volcano Vaporizer is just a vaporizer that you put your herbs into and it heats them at a precise temperature that lets all the active ingredients in the herb escape into vapor, which fills a bag that you disconnect once it's full, and then you inhale the vapors. It's kind of like smoking without the harmful effects, it's really cool. And thanks to everyone else who replied! :)

[Lhlalyam]

Will you be doing updates to the sites? I'm curious... I think the vaporizer is excellent for medicinal purposes... it just in the affiliate site... it gives another impression... thats all...

Is the vaporizer a template site? curious...
Respectfully.
Lhlalyam

[Thomas U]

The affiliate site is a herbal accessories site, but yes, the Vaporizer is used for medicinal marijuana most of the time, as it has a greater effect than smoking, without the harmful aspects of it.

No it's not a template, I created it from scratch :)

[Lhlalyam]

Very impressive template then. Clean... simple and to the point!

I could see the vaporizer used for other herbs... I think if you promote it this way on your site... this would be good... Is it also possible to purchase the vaporizer through your site rather than the affiliate site?

Lhlalyam

[Thomas U]

If I had enough money to buy them wholesale and ship them then yes. But unfortunately I'm only 17 and don't have too much money :P

[the genie]

Overall seems to be good I like

[hillbh]

good work, cheers

[rome]

I like....