Soccer ebook

[sebastya]

http://www.BeLikeRonaldinho.com

Please tell me what you think of the sales letter.

Thanks :)

[Andrei Savu]

the page looks empty and just like other million of sales pages.
try to create some custom design to get rid of the sales page template look.

[8everything]

the page looks empty and just like other million of sales pages.
try to create some custom design to get rid of the sales page template look.

I agree. There are several free templates that you can use online at templatebox.com (and.. of course googling some more up).

If you do decide to keep this layout however, I would suggest making the background dark grey or black (so the visitors are focused on the middle content!)

[bigdnl]

I agree with 8everything.

[sebastya]

I'm talking more about the sales letter, not the design.

Any tips?

[8everything]

I'm talking more about the sales letter, not the design.

Any tips?

I like how you told your own story in the letter (very engaging). The testimonials and the free trial. However, it didn't convince me because I'm not a soccer fan. Maybe start off with a short blurb/hook about how great soccer is and how it benefits you, etc (to convince the non-soccer fans).

[rajuthan]

Add some more images near the middle of the article

[ondoin]

I agree also with Andrei.

[thedark]

i'm wonder if this ebook will make me run faster... sincerely, this things only improve in intensive training.

[sebastya]

not neccessarily, if you don't know how to do it, how can u train for it?

[dojo]

spam page, this is how I call direct marketing pages. And as soon as I see their "famous' layout I close the browser. Sorry, but I have a huge aversion to this kind of stuff